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The Apocalypse



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Wed Mar 30, 2011 5:38 am
Alpha says...



The Apocalypse


Verse one:
They were always hidden in the dark,
They made sure we'd never reach Noah's Ark
They're behind; The destruction of the human kind

Chorus:
All these years , they've been watching;
Eyes in the skies and they are glinting;
Haunting you; Underground's where you're
Taken to die

Verse two:
Nothing can save us now;
Only love can bring them down;
And all the love that we all shared; Just disappeared into thin air
(Without a trace)

Chorus:
Haven't we all been living for wisdom
All these years , they've been watching;
Then why does the strongest rule the kingdom
Eyes in the skies and they are glinting;
Haunting you; Underground's where you're
Taken to start your new life
Bridge:
Gone are the days when we all loved someone;
Gone are our days; The nightmare has begun.

Gone: are the days of children running in the corridors
Gone: are the days of picking all the roses I adore
Oh, gone are the days with happiness in the air;
All gone now all I see is emptiness everywhere;

Chorus:
All these years , they've been watching;
Eyes in the skies and they are glinting;
Haunting you; Underground's where you're
Taken to;
Witness what you've all feared
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Did you like it?
Is it too scary? (I'm not good at being scary, so I think it's not scary at all. Though wait untill you hear it with its melody and guitaring... that is really spooky :) )
So tell me what you think of it.
And rate it -the song, not the scariness-from 1-10 (1 sucks, 10 is awesome).
( I bet I'll get a dozen 1s.)

Cheers,
Alpha
Last edited by Alpha on Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:11 pm, edited 1 time in total.
  





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Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:07 pm
dregymayfield says...



I\'ll give you a 3 for effort. It wasn\'t really scary at all. Feel free to rate my lyrics as well if you don\'t mind using your same scale.

Have a nice morning/day/night depending on when you read this
  





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Wed Mar 30, 2011 4:11 pm
Alpha says...



Aw :(
Is it that bad?
  








He who has a why to live for can bear with almost any how.
— Friedrich Nietzsche