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Don't Forget



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Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:05 pm
Ross says...



DON'T FORGET

Hold on, just hold on
Just for a little while longer
Don't fall, don't you dare fall
The stars have no claim on you yet

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright

Hold up for a moment
Put down the knife
Breathe in, just breathe
You are brighter than the stars

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright

Bridge:
Light up, light up
Don't let the darkness consume you
Louder, louder
So the stars will know who you are

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright
And we'll be a dream...

"Dee Dubbleyou." - BigBadBear
  





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Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:56 pm
summerlovee says...



This would be a good song (:
Just one thing "don't you dare fall" that didn't work with me but you choose
also try to put in more other verses in between
other than that this was really good (:
Linger on, your pale blue eyes
  





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Sun Feb 20, 2011 4:41 pm
AlyKat says...



DON'T FORGET

Hold on, just hold on
Just for a little while longer
Don't fall, don't you dare fall
The stars have no claim on you yet

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright

Hold up for a moment
Put down the knife
Breathe in, just breathe
You are brighter than the stars

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright

Bridge:
Light up, light up
Don't let the darkness consume you
Louder, louder
So the stars will know who you are

Chorus:
Never forget that you shine bright
Don't forget that I'm by your side
Use me for what you need
As long as you shine bright








I love this song and can get the emotion from it really clearly
but try adding a few more words to each verse. I mean if you look at other song lyrics from professionals you'll see the lyrics stretched out longer.

Get a beat to it and i swear I'd listen to it all day =) =D!!
Oompa Loompa something something something :)
  








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