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Valentine



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Fri Feb 11, 2011 11:56 pm
RieOngaku says...



(INTRO)

Will it happen

My dear

Will ya finally say it

Admit it

You know you wanna do it



Will it happen

My dear

Will you finally shout it

Sing it

You know you really wanna do it



Like I said



Throw back your shoulders

Let your heart sing it out

Let your mind

Let it shout

Go forward

Don't go backward

Yeahhh….



(VERSE 1)

Can’t help myself

I’m just a girl

And you’re just such a guy

Who’s outta this world



You know that you are

I’m sure you do

You’re like a shooting star

Just going far

Away, away, away….



(And I say,

Dream baby

Dream away

Cause you’re gonna get me someday

You know you want me

I know you do



And I say,

Dream baby

Dream away

Cause you’re gonna have me someday

You know you’re gonna get me someday

You know you will

I know you will )(X2)



(And

I’ve asked you once

Won’t ask you twice

Will you be my valentine tonight)(X4)



(Piano Solo)



The End
Last edited by RieOngaku on Tue Feb 15, 2011 2:36 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Sat Feb 12, 2011 1:35 am
Jashael says...



Wow... you've got a line of "piano solo". With all the repeated lines, it's a good thing, I assume, that you've already got a melody for it. :D Nice job, girl. Ain't no reviews yet? Well, I think there's a problem. I just have a suggestion with the format. Edit this and put it in "poem" mode so the space between the lines will squeeze in a bit and it will be easier to read. Just click edit, roll down the page, and you'll see a line of four format choices: default, poem, story and none. Click in the "poem" and you'll be good. :D So there... KEEP WRITING! :D
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