I Won't Give Up

Alright, here is my review:

1. I still believe in my dreams

No matter what happens to me

I think you should say: I (will, or would) still believe in my dreams. Because you used no matter.

2. I don't care what peoples say about me. Maybe peoples is a word, but I would rather use people, in order to keep the poem a little formal. But it is your poem, and you know what is best for it.

3.Why should I live in dreams

When my dreams will come true someday

This is my favorite part of this poem.

4.I won't give up in my hopes

I won't give up in my dreams

I won't give up in my Cinderella storybook

I would use the word "on" rather than "in" because you are not living in your hopes and dreams or in your storybook.

Other than that, I love your persistance and the feeling that you are strong and relentless over what you desire in your life. I would also advise you to expand this a little more. You seem like a person with wide-ranged dreams, so write them all down.

I love it! Can you do another one, but a bit more dramatic? Like, with imagery and stuff. I think it would be SUPER EPIC! But I REALLY love this!

beautiful i love it , you really poured your heart into this poem and it shows.
I enjoyed this and i'm looking forward to seeing more writing from you.

happy writing

Thank you for the reviews. Maybe it looked like a poem but actually it's a part of my song.I wrote it when I was eleven. I just found it when I was cleaning my room. And once again, thanks for the reviews.

Hi!

You're only thirteen but I can sense too much passion already.

Dreams are there to dream no matter how long or how tough they seem to achieve.

This has a very good message that each kid everywhere in the world must read.

Dream.

It's one thing no one can take away from us.

Congratulations.

Write more, please? Good luck!