Young Writers Society

Ok so im still not sure bout the name. Also i am shy so be kind.

(V1) I have so much life,
In front of me.
But there is so much strife
Inside of me.
So many options,
Places to go,
They are all meaningless,
In this bitter dark hole.

(Ch) Emptiness surrounding me,
Filled with demons no one can see.
Hollowness inside my soul,
Impulsions I cant control.
Stuck inside this bottomless pit,
Slowly, swiftly loosing my whits.

(V2) Many thoughts filling my head,
Morbid thoughts left unsaid.
I have bright life,
Flowing in my brain.
But the darkness that covers,
Is making me insane.

(to Ch)

(Bridge) Thick darkness covering me,
Eating my life, my soul you see.
Putrid, dank, black hole,
I'm stuck inside,
There's my ugliness,
I cant hide,
I CANT hide![/b]

oooooooooh. I liked this!!

What genre of music would this be?

As for a title I reckon 'Demons' would kinda be cool...

Alainna
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Bloody hell, that was deep. Your use of images is incredible, dark and intriguing, if a bit depressing in parts. The rhyme scheme was a bit all over the place but that doesn't really matter when the words themselves are this good.
The only problem I have with this is that it's more like poetry then a song. What I mean is, it's very hard to imagine this being sung, whereas imagining it being read on a poetry program or in a magazine makes more sense. Songs should be a bit more free-flowing and definate, you know?
Otherwise though, this was good work, despite being a bit emo-ee (is that a word?) for my liking.
Well done.

thanks heaps Alainna!!! your probably right Thriving Fire it did actually start off as a poem, but then the music entered my head. i might think about redoing it, see what happens. thanks heaps for repling and giving me good crtitcism and awsome compliments!!