Young Writers Society

This is okay, but I have some critiques. First off, since you clearly know how to spell "to", are the "tooo"'s supposed to indicate a longer-held note? If they are, then it sort of makes sense. If not, fix them. There's some other typos ("m" instead of "me", etc.) but I'll let you find them.

Second off, you clearly like puncuation. This isn't a bad thing, but the excessive "!"'s and "?!?!"s take away from their meaning a bit. I suppose this would indicate that the phrase is sung with a bit more emotion or screaming, but I personally think that with lyrics, you should keep it simple.

Now on to some actual lines:

I could not lie
And I could not cry
Bout the night you became my savior

I have read this piece many times and STILL cannot figure out what you're trying to say here. Make it a little more specific. It would be more interesting.

It was required for you to give me your shoulder when I was sad

Too many syllables! Maybe "You were supposed to..." or something like that.

Also there's a lot of cliches in here. "The one", "meant to be" and "there for me" are the main ones. While one of these wouldn't be too bad, all three of them completely obscure whatever meaning there is in this piece. "You were supposed to be there for me," comes up a lot. Why was "you" supposed to be there? How wasn't he? How can you express your emotions about this betrayal in an original way?

This piece may have some potential. Keep living, writing, and improving, then come back and see what you can do with it.