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Thu Mar 31, 2011 8:29 pm
Kamas says...



Let it begin...

again. (I'm terribly excited.)

Spoiler! :
Je suis né tôt ce matin, juste avant que le soleil comprenne
Qu’il va falloir qu’il se lève et qu’il prenne son petit crème
Je suis né tôt ce matin, entouré de plein de gens bien
Qui me regardent un peu chelou et qui m’appellent Fabien

Quand le soleil apparaît j’essaie de réaliser ce qu’il se passe
Je tente de comprendre le temps et j’analyse mon espace
Il est 7 heures du mat’ sur l’horloge de mon existence
Je regarde la petite aiguille et j’imagine son importance

Pas de temps à perdre ce matin, je commence par l’alphabet
Y’a plein de choses à apprendre si tu veux pas finir tebê
C’est sûr, je serais pas un génie mais ça va y’a pire
Sur les coups de 7 heures et demie j’ai appris à lire et à écrire

La journée commence bien, il fait beau et je suis content
Je reçois plein d’affection et je comprends que c’est important
Il est bientôt 9 heures et demie et j’aborde l’adolescence
En pleine forme, plein d’envie et juste ce qu’il faut d’insouciance

Je commence à me la raconter, j’ai plein de potes et je me sens fort
Je garde un peu de temps pour les meufs quand je suis pas en train de faire du sport
Emploi du temps bien rempli, et je suis à la bourre pour mes rencards
Putain la vie passe trop vite, il est déjà 11 heures moins le quart

Celui qui veut me viser, je lui conseille de changer de cible
Me toucher est impossible, à 11 heures je me sens invincible
Il fait chaud, tout me sourit, il manquait plus que je sois amoureux
C’est arrivé sans prévenir sur les coups d’11 heures moins 2

Mais tout à coup, alors que dans le ciel, y’avait pas un seul nuage
A éclaté au-dessus de moi un intolérable orage
Il est 11 heures 08 quand ma journée prend un virage
Pour le moins inattendu alors je tourne mais j’ai la rage
Je me suis pris un éclair comme un coup d’électricité
Je me suis relevé mais j’ai laissé un peu de mobilité
Mes tablettes de chocolat sont devenues de la marmelade
Je me suis fait à tout ça, appelez moi Grand Corps Malade.

Cette fin de matinée est tout sauf une récréation.
A 11 heures 20 je dois faire preuve d’une bonne dose d’adaptation
Je passe beaucoup moins de temps à me balader rue de la Rép’
Et j’apprends à remplir les papiers de la Cotorep.

J’ai pas que des séquelles physiques, je vais pas faire le tho-my
Mais y’a des cicatrices plus profondes qu’une trachéotomie
J’ai eu de la chance je suis pas passé très loin de l’échec et mat
Mais j’avoue que j’ai encore souvent la nostalgie de 10 heures du mat’

A midi moins le quart, j’ai pris mon stylo bleu foncé
J’ai compris que lui et ma béquille pouvaient me faire avancer
J’ai posé des mots sur tout ce que j’avais dans le bide
J’ai posé des mots et j’ai fait plus que combler le vide
J’ai été bien accueilli dans le cercle des poètes du bitume
Et dans l’obscurité, j’avance au clair de ma plume

J’ai assommé ma pudeur, j’ai assumé mes ardeurs
Et j’ai slamé mes joies, mes peines, mes envies et mes erreurs
Il est midi 19 à l’heure où j’écris ce con d’texte
Je vous ai décrit ma matinée pour que vous sachiez le contexte
Car si la journée finit à minuit, il me reste quand même pas mal de temps
J’ai encore tout l’après-midi pour faire des trucs importants

C’est vrai que la vie est rarement un roman en 18 tomes
Toutes les bonnes choses ont une fin, on ne repousse pas l’ultimatum
Alors je vais profiter de tous les moments qui me séparent de la chute
Je vais croquer dans chaque instant, je ne dois pas perdre une minute
Il me reste tellement de choses à faire que j’en ai presque le vertige
Je voudrais être encore un enfant mais j’ai déjà 28 pijes
Alors je vais faire ce qu’il faut pour que mes espoirs ne restent pas vains
D’ailleurs je vous laisse, là c’est chaud,

il est déjà midi 20.

-- Fabien Marsaud


Note: that each day the song I was listening to at the time is linked! Did it last year, going to do it again.
Last edited by Kamas on Wed May 25, 2011 9:38 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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1.

sometimes I wonder how much death works,
how much it would take to stop you from feeling
your fingertips and the way the earth cracked in them,
fractured finger bones. Maybe it forgot
the glossy eyed birds that tumbled from your lips in January,
the ones that breathe to your heartbeats.
how it could possibly tear the wires from your veins,
if that meant
the world split in two,
and their little wings curled in,
I'd like to keep your words vacuum-sealed
just in case.
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Fri Apr 01, 2011 11:22 pm
borntobeawriter says...



I was going to tell you it should be' je suis née', then I read on ;)
  





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sometimes I wonder how much death works,
how much it would take to stop you from feeling
your fingertips and the way the earth cracked in them,
fractured finger bones. Maybe it forgot
the glossy eyed birds that tumbled from your lips in January,
the ones that breathe to your heartbeats.
how it could possibly tear the wires from your veins,
if that meant
the world split in two,
and their little wings curled in,
I'd like to keep your words vacuum-sealed
just in case.


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Sat Apr 02, 2011 11:20 pm
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Kamas says...



2.

A/N: No judging, I'm brain dead today.

You didn't show your teeth today
pulling on your tongue because I heard you say
how everything tasted like
the stars; splattered their splintered bodies
across the sky. And I found out today
the night is actually blood stains
spilling out like words
only poets could write.
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 1:59 am
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3.

you whispered soft snares about art,
and how this,
this is poetry
that goes something like the ring of the bells
down the block
when I realized through the whitewash
you weren't at church
because I could hear the way your
toes gripped the ground
and how your heart felt
against my skin.
That poetry tastes like
the July day you turned seventeen
but I'm pretty sure it was raining
that day because perhaps
when they touch my eyelids
I could almost feel what poetry
is, the way your hair curls in the morning
before the churchbells even ring,
the flutter of both of your eyes in tune
to your breaths and the way shadows stretch
over the nook of your wrists, and continues
up your arms and lung to lung
until it's all I can feel, echoing through my skull
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Mon Apr 04, 2011 2:01 pm
MeanMrMustard says...



It WOULD make sense you get the most likes and views basically (maybe not views, but who's paying attention???), but few comments.

The description and imagery is, well, as I've already told you. I wanted an excuse to bump this back to the first page.

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Hannah says...



you whispered soft snares about art,


This is the best, Kamas, the best. I can hear them, like tch duka tch duka tch, just softly from the back of the stage as the rest of the room mumbles.
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Tue Apr 05, 2011 11:36 am
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4.

A/N: I realize this isn't very good, but I refuse to fall behind. Rawr.


if anyone died that day,
it was me. the way it must have felt
to strip the cement down faithless
on the day the world ended, you know
when I found death in your cracked
bones and two dollar t-shirts, all I could hear
was the way your hands sound across my face.

I must have died today.
because for once I can feel my finger joints
like piano keys when you press your way down,
unbuttoning my spine.

I should of died yesterday,
but I'm never sure.
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Tue Apr 05, 2011 1:04 pm
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There are some excellent lines up above me-- awesome imagery, Rybastah. But, it all feels a bit disconnected to me right now. Relate it more. Put some more purpose behind it.
  





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Wed Apr 06, 2011 9:41 pm
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5.

A/N: I wrote a bunch of nonsense today :c

it's you again
maybe you forgot how you broke my bones
like they were flower stems
You'd always pop coronaheads off
because when I was snapped
you picked me back up
to pull the petals out.


6.

I saw the city today
for the first time in years
in the way your legs shake -
rattling like pennies
in your kneecaps.

I saw the city
in the light curved on your jaw
drilling with little pricks
to your lips, before you can answer the phone

and wait.

I lost the name of streets
you gave me
so I can't remember if it's on Main
I saw your face.


7.

talking of dogs
like dogs
to dogs.

It's a family gathering.
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Wed Apr 06, 2011 10:13 pm
Navita says...



Shh. I like your nonsense.

you know
when I found death in your cracked
bones and two dollar t-shirts, all I could hear
was the way your hands sound across my face.

...

I can feel my finger joints
like piano keys when you press your way down,
unbuttoning my spine.


The entire poem is so strong that I can't really pinpoint my favourite parts, but these two struck me the most.

talking of dogs
like dogs
to dogs.

It's a family gathering.


Made me laugh.

P.S. no more self-deprecation, okay? Else I will hide behind a YWS bush and hurl bucketfuls of nice words and lovely lines (possibly some that you yourself have written) at you.
  





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I dun care how many YWS years you have under your belt.

No grumpying at yourself. Don't make me get mad at you.
  





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Thu Apr 07, 2011 6:26 pm
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Gotta agree, you get some great responses in other's opinions to your writing.
  





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Thu Apr 07, 2011 6:29 pm
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hey there's some strong stuff in here, I'm impressed!
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