#4's layout was a little distracting to me, so it took me a few times to reread it and figure out what the poem was actually saying. The others were great, though. Some of the lines did seem forced to rhyme, but it's overall good.
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I disliked this one. It sounds cool, but I don't think it aids the poem much. I dub it fluff.Bite through to the core
of our planet
This image could show me more. I see in my mind's eye sort of the silhouette of an tree with a starry sky in the background, but I don't know if this is what you were going for.The apple tree stands solo
amongst the stars.
I don't know what the heck to make of that. While "damaged dregs/of divinity" is very neat, it does not make for a thoughtful picture to accompany the analytical view of the phrase.Children run to pick them up
and gaze at the damaged dregs
of divinity.
I don't much care for the word "pulsating" in any context. As I've said before, I think it's quite possible to nix the entire first stanza.those pulsating spheres
that hold the universe within
their crisp, smooth shells.
I would change it to "alone/against". That fits the image I described before under Imagery...but still, I'm not sure what you were going for.The apple tree stands solo
amongst the stars.
This (and the other "bruise after bruise after bruise" I would rephrase:People climb, branch by branch,
bruise after bruise after bruise
Very good; your best stanza (and its tail?). I approve of the words "retreat" and "regress" together; I think their slightly different meanings make a lot of sense for this poem. And "grow". Pretty sweet.They have it and with their
borrowed wisdom,
they grow careless
of the other fruits.
They retreat, regress
along the branches,
kicking apples to the
ground.
They fall, perhaps? I'd like "fall" better than "land".They land.
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