Young Writers Society

Just caught up with your thread again and AHHh you are SO good at these! Each one does feel like it's own little story-world, and the rhymes are smooth as well. I think my favorite one is poem 6 "mother from perth" - just something extra heart-breaking to me about that one especially in midst of me reading it in a "sing-song" voice in my head from the form. Looking forward to reading more.

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there once was a sister from leeds
who tried her best to do good deeds
then the convent went broke
and her faith turned to smoke
so she hung herself with prayer beads

these are amazing but the last two are my favorite i love how they have a sense of melancholy but also seem to appeal to dark humor.

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there once was an actor from poole
who tried his best to avoid ridicule
he stuck to pompous plays
but received no praise
as he died, he cursed critics so cruel

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there once was a lady from bristol
who always wore rings with large crystals
then one day her young man
stole her fortune and ran,
his goodbye was the steel of a pistol

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there once was a farmer from glasgow
whose life in the fields was woe
winter's breath sighed
and his crops went and died
his hunger then dealt his deathblow

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there once was a seaman from clapton
who spent his days checking the coast was mapped in
when they hit a big rock
far away from a dock
his last words were "i wish i'd been captain"

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there once was a builder from belfast
who liked windows and walls that were glassed
his love became fate
when they did defenestrate
him, smiling at each floor he passed

ahh i love all these poems, Plume! they’re super fun to read aloud with the rhymes and rhythm, but also have tragic ends… and those ends make sense with the rest of the poem (like, the builder who liked windows being defenestrated? oh, the irony :’)). each poem is just so well-crafted. also impressed by the way you’ve been sticking to limericks this whole month! great dedication right there. =D looking forward to the rest of your poetry this april!! ^-^ <3

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there once was a singer from wales
whose voice sounded like chalkboard and nails
the town tired of screaming
so when the train came streaming
they left her there, tied on the rails

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there once was a joker from chester
who dreamed of becoming a jester
the only thing was
his jokes got no applause
so he burned them and let himself fester

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there once was a doctor from brighton
whose patients he always enlightened
one day blood he did drain
when he hit his own vein
and bled out as his face and limbs whitened

I have nothing remotely helpful to say, other than I love how delightfully twisty and twisted these are. 11/10 perfect use of form definitely recommend.

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there once was a good priest from clare
who led congregants each day in prayer
god wasn't around
when he tripped on his gown
and fell hard down the steps, stair by stair

The absolute morbidity of each poem is so unexpected but also inexplicably perfect. Limericks are usually goofy, silly, lighthearted poems and so to have that expectation combined with lines like "they left her there, tied to the rails" and "and bled out as his face and limbs whitened" is...genius.

Also on a purely technical level, the meter and rhyme is very impressive. I can tell you've put effort into making each line follow a smooth meter, because dang they flow off the tongue so easily.

10/10 thread!