Young Writers Society

I gotta say I've loved all your poetry this month but 17 is just so vibrant! I especially loved

biscuit paint chips drop to the floor as my nails drill through wet grime and weathered paper.

I can feel that and I hate it! It's such powerful imagery!
You did such a great job this month! <3

Okay I've been really bad at reading other people's threads, but obviously after your effusive review of mine, I had to come see what you wrote and I am blown away. I love the aesthetics of the cover imagery and the wording is gorgeous. My favorites are probably #1, #12, and the last one. Great job! <3

E, your thread is impeccable. All these gritty / evocative images and interesting formatting and the poetry is lovely too - it's just such an absolute treat to read through, and you can return to these types of poems again and again and again because there's so many images and layers.

I love that you squeezed the YWS Iconic Dishwasher Poetry Genre in there. That made me chuckle. The poem itself though is very good and certainly not a joke - love that powerful final line "but I am strong enough to love." <3

In death chase - > at first I misread it to be that the speaker was moving their own body into the sack and tossing it away, and then re-read more closely to see that was not the case - but I think that there is still sort of a feeling of the speaker encountering not just death of the "other" (or in this case a pigeon) but encountering Death as like a state of being. Really interesting, and you describe that stomach-lurch feeling of encountering a dead-body really well too.

"my love is little, but so loud." (!!) love love love that line. A lot of your poems have this soft defiant feeling to them and then just this sort of revelation over the gore / death of bodies and brokenness, and how that can link to love.

One of my other favorite turns in your thread were these lines from poem 7:

i dare not die like you /
i turn in my grave like its a bed

I loved the themes you explored and the links between the poems with the different burial images and uncovering. There's a lot of depth and I could read a whole book of your poetry. Congratulations on such a lovely thread - and also thank you for spreading so much joy and encouragement this April. We are so lucky to have you on the site and in our poetry community.