rain on soft leaves, kisses on sunbeams

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Mon Mar 28, 2022 2:40 am

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Apricity says...

may you find softness here amidst the chaos

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the goal:a poem a day and hopefully more than last year's

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'And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who could not hear the music.' ― Friedrich Nietzsche

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Fri Apr 01, 2022 4:39 am

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Apricity says...

asleep

pearlscent light on your skin,
softly gleaming like moonlight on the silent sea.

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Sat Apr 02, 2022 2:00 am

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at night, i think about summer of my childhood,
osthamus scented whispers in the air, air in the osthamus whispers
cloudy skies, muddied tracks
mango leaves fallen wayside, with the promise of summer lingering
in the air

the smallest moments
sometimes leave the heaviest imprints. does it?
or is it simply because those moments are only moments
memories, only staying as memories

these are summers that have found a home inside my heart
a cove
i visit again and again and again
because no matter how many summers came after
none was quite the same

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Sun Apr 03, 2022 3:12 pm

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Liminality says...

Hi @Apricity! "pearlescent light" is such a lovely and sonorous phrase. I also adore that summer poem. The repetition of the words within lines feel like echoes or sounds carried over by the wind, which seems to resonate with the theme of memory. I also really like how you position specific images like "mango leaves" in a way that really grabs the attention.

these are summers that have found a home inside my heart

^ I just love this line

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Sat Apr 23, 2022 8:04 pm

alliyah says...

The way you bring to light just these precise gorgeous images is so lovely Apricity - I particularly liked the line that Lim already highlighted and also this

the smallest moments
sometimes leave the heaviest imprints

there's so much to that phrase and then its context in the poem seems so thoughtful too. <3 Good luck in the final week here!

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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