Hey again!
"Can anyone hear me" was such a great way to begin a spoken word poem, and WOW that was very emotive, I could almost see it being read as a dialogue of a play, excellent reading. That long pause between "haluccination" and "am I dead" was also really effective - and your pacing and volume changes throughout really did add to the piece. And the line "is this how ghosts are made" I also thought was really interesting.
Also AHHH love a good blackout poem, glad you included one of those! The first "stanza" of the blackout in particular I really enjoyed.
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