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Of beautiful birds in circling flight



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Tue Apr 13, 2021 3:28 pm
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keystrings says...



I’ve always loved haikus and acrostic — I don’t have much feedback here besides that I like how some themes are reoccurring — with descriptions of nature. I can really visual every poem!
name: key/string/perks
pronouns: she/her/hers and they/them/theirs


novel: the clocktower (camp nano apr 24)
poetry: the beauty of the untold (napo 2024)
  





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Thu Apr 15, 2021 11:52 pm
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Valkyria says...



13. It’s All Over


Black snuffed out the stars
Constellations gone so soon
Planets exploded
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Sat Apr 17, 2021 6:04 pm
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14. Untitled


The sight
moved me to tears.
Eclipse
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Mon Apr 19, 2021 2:59 pm
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Valkyria says...



15.

My promises wilt
like plants given no water.
You’re disappointed.
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Mon Apr 19, 2021 4:35 pm
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16. Cringeworthy

The memories come at just the
wrong moments. Snapping me
out of the present,
throwing me into the past.
Just short flashes, but
they succeed in making me regret
the decisions I made.
Even the smallest occurence
makes me shudder.
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Tue Apr 20, 2021 11:13 pm
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17. Out of Earth


Life spirals
over the moon.
Happiness.
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Tue Apr 20, 2021 11:24 pm
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Valkyria says...



18. Untitled

Love
conquers all
hate
in the end.
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  





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Tue Apr 20, 2021 11:39 pm
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Spearmint says...



Spoiler! :
Ooh wait a second, is "Untitled" one of those poems you can read top-to-bottom and bottom-to-top? If so, that's super cool!! :DDD

I also enjoyed reading number 15.; the simile is so vivid and neat! Good luck with the rest of NaPo, Valkyria!! ^-^
mint, she/her


.--. / ... ...- -.-. .-.. / - .--. ..- .- / .--- --- ...- .--- / .--- --- .--. .-- / .--. .--- .-.. / .--- -.-- .-.. .... -
=D
  





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Wed Apr 21, 2021 10:51 pm
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Valkyria says...



Spoiler! :
Thank you, @Spearmint! I really wanted to try mirror poetry, so I’m glad you liked that Untitled!


19. Thank Goodness for Fiction

I wish to escape
this problematic life.
Books give me passion
for the imagination,
painting scenes with their pages.
There is always something left to love.
- One Hundred Years of Solitude
  








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