^ Then how come I am hungry for dinner and it's only noon, huh?
#the selfless act by the way, I found super chilling. I read it as a battle of conflicts within oneself. On the one hand, there's the selfless part of you that is reconstructed, formed, crafted upon. And the other part that the narrator feels faded away, that is chilling in a kind of body-snatcher way. The feels are raw and real and the deliverance of the voice ambivalent - is it a part of itself lost, or a celebration of sacrifice, or both or none? I loved it.
Also the use of brackets (especially in the very last line) of your second poem, I thought was really cool! I really like the "In case you didn't catch on..." thing that the brackets say. Like a lot.
I also just love seeing your use of leaving the poems as one thing (instead of breaking it up into stanzas) and using capitalisation and cool stuff like that to define where you want pauses and stuff. Maybe this sounds silly what I'm saying, but I just was happy to see it worked really nicely- because that was something I was thinking about earlier today, wanting to leave my poem just in one column without the reader having to read it so hurriedly.
Audster: Aaaah who knows the answers to your questions?? NOT ME. Thank you tho, <3<3
Holyrocks: How awesome are brackets?! I don't use them too often, but I love that they're asides while also not being to the side. You don't sound silly at all! You should totes just go for writing poetry like that if you want to. Don't be afraid or nervous or unsure about doing what is instinctual to you - it's more likely to be worth the time of writing it!
I like you as an enemy, but I love you as a friend.
Woah, #6 is literally crushing, and I love #9 as well. I like it all, though those two especially stood out to me because dang are they short yet very powerful pieces.
[Edit: Totally forgot about this place. Thanks for moving my comment and sorry about that!]
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