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Tue Apr 01, 2014 12:02 am
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lostthought says...



Here's my NaPo thing! This should be fun for my first time doing this.

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Last edited by lostthought on Thu Apr 10, 2014 3:37 am, edited 4 times in total.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
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Fri Apr 04, 2014 2:34 am
lostthought says...



A New Story

Spoiler! :
A pencil, pen, eraser,
Sitting on the desk.
Waiting, watching, as they are chosen.

A blank page,
Yearning to be full
Of beautiful words

A new idea,
Maybe one rediscovered,
Fills your mind as you sit.

Staring at the blank page,
A pencil in your hand,
You are ready to write.

Here comes the beautiful villain,
And the gruesome hero,
About to fight for a single wish.

The villain, a wish to be happy.
The hero, a wish to be handsome.
When in his heart, the hero is kind.

It all begins in a single stroke
Of a pen.
That's how it also ends.

In the end, the villain is dead,
While the hero sits and regrets his mistake
That he made for his new found beauty.

For beauty comes with a price.
The price of happiness
That turns the kindest hearts black.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
-QueenOfHearts
  





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Fri Apr 04, 2014 2:41 am
lostthought says...



Jealousy

Spoiler! :
Jealousy, a horror
Most find within their hearts. If
You have this, just run.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
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Sat Apr 05, 2014 2:06 am
lostthought says...



To Start the Day
Spoiler! :
One foot forward,
The other back,
Let's take two steps
To start the day.

One heart pumps,
The other fails,
Let's feel the heart beat
To start the day.

One pencil writes,
The other finishes,
Let's write the story
To start the day.

A smile on one face,
A frown on the other,
Let's smile at least once
To start the day.

One step, two steps, three.
One beat, two beats, three.
One pencil, two pencils, three.
Walk forward, breathe, and write to start the day.

A day walking,
With your heart beating,
And your pencil writing,
Is another day started.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
-Pompadour

"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
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Tue Apr 08, 2014 9:08 pm
Audy says...



Jealousy - made me laugh xD I luff haikus <3 The first line has an extra syllable, maybe you can fix it like:
Jealousy: horrors
most find within their hearts. If

To Start the Day - I love how this takes a slice of every day life, it's got a nice feel to it. A New Story had the same feel to it as well, and makes it personal because we can all relate to the writing process.

Keep it going!!
  





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Thu Apr 10, 2014 3:37 am
lostthought says...



Mirror or Camera

Spoiler! :
The mirror:
Shows perfection.
A beautiful image
That seems too good to be true.

The camera:
Shows flaws.
A image of ugliness
That hurts in more ways than one.

The mirror:
Shows the truth.
How we really look inside
Even if no others can see it.

The camera:
Shows lies.
How everyone else sees yourself
Even though it's not the real you.
"Aaloo is potato in urdu, like AAAAAA-loo, or like AAAAA-look such delicious deliciousness."
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"MY SOUL IS A GREY ABYSS"
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Thu Apr 17, 2014 4:26 pm
Deanie says...



Interesting concept of the mirror telling the truth and a camera telling a lie. I like how you put it in the poem.

Personally I think both can lie exceptionally well, but really what tells the truth are your own thoughts in the end :D
Trust in God and all else follows.

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When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
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