Young Writers Society

SPOILERS WERE THE BEST PART.

But I absolutely loved The First Generation. It's sticking in me, like sticky in my throat or something. It's really beautiful. Thank you!

No, thank you, Hannah!

The following is a poeticized version of a excerpt from a short story that's been bumping around on my computer for the last few months. So you may see this again in the future.


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among the things for which I have no apologies...yessss. Oh yes. More proof our brains work on the same waves, sarg -- see my April 9th poem. I want to mess yours up and destroy all punctuation also, but I like what you're doing in it, anyway. Nice to see some daring here on YWS, some destruction of form. Stirs things up a little.

Also, read: Jun

Good ol' collective unconscious!
Jun is great. How do you find these things? I just find myself scrounging through poetry sections in used bookstores and tossing aside all the unwanted high school required readings.

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Thanks for taking me there, with you.

Jesus, sarg.

I forgot to breathe reading your latest. I'm sure you must be lying. How on earth can you write poetry this well having not written since NaPo? Good God.

I've never been so mesmerised by such a long poem before -- you never lose energy in this, it attacks from every direction. *Rereads.*

Same effect, second time. Stunning.

So good.

It reminds me of that bit in Watchmen when Dr. Manhattan is on Mars jumping through his life non-sequentially.

Jack (may I call you Jack? Everyone else seems to): I hadn't thought of that, but now that I have I'm afraid of being derivative! That part was freaking great, though. Did you see the movie? I didn't, but I wonder how they handled that (or if they handled it at all...what with the lack of space-squid and all).

Navita: What is prose but epic poetry? Thanks.

Hannah: Glad you could make it.

Your last poem is far and away the best I've read so far in NaPo. Hell, it's one of my favourites regardless of NaPo --I don't read much poetry, usually.

Jack's right, though I didn't see it to begin with, I was too busy paying attention. On Watchmen though, don't bother watching the movie. It fails.

Jiggity wrote:On Watchmen though, don't bother watching the movie. It fails.

Ha! Figured. Just curious, though, because there was so much cinematographic potential outside of Michael Bay action cuts and John Woo slow-mos...Damn shame.


Toning it down, now. Need a break today.
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sargsauce wrote:12. Labyrinth

How did I not notice this before? Very, very impressed. Will read the rest of yours.