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Tue Jan 01, 2008 12:20 pm
Loose says...



Yes, I think she was the girl who sat next to me in Maths class in seventh grade. She was the one who used "acute angle" to describe cute guys...
  





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Wed Jan 02, 2008 1:06 am
Doctor Kitty says...



That sentence is all mutilated and bloodied up. D: Make it go away!
  





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Wed Jan 02, 2008 1:20 am
OverEasy says...



it's... artistic?

Yeah ok, not the best sentence ever. Maybe the author was trying to be abstract but failing horribly?
  





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Wed Jan 02, 2008 1:21 am
Loose says...



Pro-activ will treat that!
  





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Wed Jan 02, 2008 6:12 am
Wolf says...



Yeah, 'failing horribly' is pretty accurate.
I get what she meant - kind of - but its horribly purple and not very well-worded. >.<
But personally, I find it very encouraging. If that can be published, so can I! xD
everything i loved
became everything i lost.


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Thu Jan 03, 2008 10:36 pm
lyrical_sunshine says...



lol sentences like these give me hope. it's like, "okay, i AGONIZE over the word 'voice' in one sentence, and yet these authors are making a living out of publishing stuff like THAT. MAYBE I HAVE A CHANCE!!!!

maybe that's the wrong way to think about it, but whatever.
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Thu Jan 03, 2008 11:24 pm
Sumi H. Inkblot says...



Cpt. Smurf wrote:Tanith Lee? And there was me thinking we had a sneak peek at the next Paolini "novel".

That's exactly what I was thinking! D:
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Thu Jan 03, 2008 11:52 pm
Loose says...



I find that very purple.
  





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Thu Jan 03, 2008 11:53 pm
Aet Lindling says...



O_O

Are they twins, or something? Or is Paolini her son?
dun worry
it's all gun be k
  





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Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:01 am
Loose says...



Yeah, they are cousins.
  





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Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:06 am
Sumi H. Inkblot says...



I say that this Tannith person is actually Paolini's identical twin, lost in a parallel universe until she found a way to break into our universe.
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Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:07 am
Aet Lindling says...



I say she must've made a deal with the devil to break in.
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Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:11 am
Loose says...



That devil fellow is easy to bargin with.
  





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Fri Jan 04, 2008 12:13 am
Sumi H. Inkblot says...



Aet Lindling wrote:I say she must've made a deal with the devil to break in.

The devil probably gave her a thesaurus, too.
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