Soooo, the christian god is telling me its easy? There is no such thing as a paper not littered with pictures and words by the time I am done with it. Or is it saying that I would make a amazing god?
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Last edited by Zolen on Tue Dec 16, 2014 11:43 am, edited 1 time in total.
Self quoting is the key to sounding wise and all knowing.
6/10 I think you're supposed to have spaces after ellipses... Plus the first phrase reads pretty awkwardly in conjunction with the second phrase. And I don't know who Baroquemonger is, but that's more of my problem than yours.
Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger. To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!
4/10 I don't know who said it, nor if it's supposed to be funny, and you should always say who said something. Sounds like something from Napoleon Dynamite, but also like something Gollum would say.
Instead, he said, Brother! I know your hunger. To this, the Wolf answered, Lo!
When we are children we seldom think of the future. This innocence leaves us free to enjoy ourselves as few adults can. The day we fret about the future is the day we leave our childhood behind. — Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
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