UWC stands for United World College. It is an international Junior-Senior high school with many locations around the world. This is my application essay. Please give it an honest critique. I want it to be the best it can be!
Prompt: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
The person who has undoubtedly had the largest influence on me throughout my life is by far my mother. She has inspired and encouraged me to take chances and pursue my personal goals. Her influence has also shaped my character and personality by great measure. She is exceptionally kind, even in situations that most would lose their patience in. She does not overreact or seek revenge. I have learned patience, virtue, and kindness from observing her actions. I believe that she has made me able to be kind, even to those who are not kind to me .Even though She has not lived a perfect life, she knows how to make the best out of tough situations and how to smile through the pain. From this example, I have learned to stay strong when things seem to be going wrong for me. She is there to comfort me and support me when I am going through a rough situation. She has definitely made me emotionally stronger. She also provides me with helpful advice when I need it. Her advice has made me able to provide advice of my own to others who need help. There are many things that I would not have been able to do without her support, but with her help I have decided to follow through with my dreams. She has encouraged me to excel in school and get the best grades I am capable of. She also encouraged and assisted me in starting the knitting club I had aspired to create. As a young child I was shy and I had trouble interacting with other children. She taught me bravery and social skills that have continued to help me throughout my entire life. I developed my sense of humor from her, and it has helped me gain many friends and impress many of my superiors. I know the reasons that I have so many friends and am able to get along well with others are all things I learned from my mother. She has taught me to be a good, reliable friend by being one of my best friends. I believe that having a good relationship my mother has helped me with all the relationships in my life. She has shown me how to be happy with and appreciate what I already have and to accept the things that I cannot have. She has several medical conditions, including rheumatoid arthritis, that cause her to be in pain almost all of the time, but she still manages to live her life. I can not describe how inspiring this is to me. The way she has influenced me the most, though, is by being an excellent and selfless mother to her children. I think I become a little more like her every day.
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