The Other Side of Happiness

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Prologue
Ever since I was little, I was never allowed to make friends of my own. I could never break into that warm happiness that others could. I couldn’t indulge in the pleasure and of love and friendship. I couldn’t experience a single taste of sweet pleasure that most probably take for granted, for I am the dark side of humanities joy.




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Woah. Ha ha =] Very ominous beginning. Hope to read more into the plot and all once you have a bit more posted =]
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Hi there =D

Even though this was quite short, and I mean short, I thought it said a lot. It says that our MC isn't like everyone and is possibly an outcast. There was a small error but other than that I didn't spot anything. Nice job, try to make the first chapter lengthy.

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Well, it is very short for a proplogue. If that is all you plan on having, might I suggest using it as the beginning of your first chapter instead? However, if you plan on adding more to this, great start! One error: humanities should have an apostrophe. Remember, if you do decide to use this for your first chapter, you can always use *, --- , ...; there are a variety of marks to tell the reader you are moving to a different time. Overall, great job; I was really drawn in by your language.
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