Kyle and Ariel?! Omg that REALLY caught me off guard. Somehow I think that I shouldn't be reading this until I finish Ch. but of course I'll read it anyways since my favorite characters ever are in it and... they still care about each other at least from what I got. lol
This is wonderful, I like all the twists you've put in it so far. And Jon in Texas? Away from Kyle...Oh no! I hope he doesn't do it but even if he does I'm certain you'll make it a great transition, I'm always happy as to what directions you take!
Keep at it!
~Rieda
I love, love.
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Nice switch that Jon doesn't end up rescheduling his meeting. Hmm, I suppose this would make alot more sense had I read "Ch" (yeah, don't know how to spell it...) I also liked how their emotions were presented: so that the reader isn't told exactly (such as when they can't tell the difference between tears and rain), but can obviously infer. Duh, Amelia, that would be the point
-sigh- So even though I have little clue as to what's going on, I probably will end up reading the rest. Oh well.
For according to the trollish philosopher Plateau, "if you wants to understan' an enemy, you gotta walk a mile in his shoes. Den, if he's still your enemy, at least you're a mile away and he's got no shoes." — A Blink of the Screen by Terry Pratchett
