Good start to the story.
I agree, i think it should just start with her walking through the park rather than the little introduction part.
And i'm glad that you didn't go into too much detail with the rape. I personally would have been very uncomfortable, but then again, being an author is about making your readers feel happy, sad, or even uncomfortable, so maybe it could do with more description?
Kadie x
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