Round Like The Moon (4)

Chapter 4: The Test!

I was staring at my ceiling. I couldn’t sleep anymore. I was afraid I was going to have another nightmare. Ever since Emma said that I could be pregnant I’ve been having all sorts of nightmares, the most recent one was me aborting the child. In my dream I actually felt relief, but then I started hearing noises: babies crying and even that little vacuum they use to get the baby out. I woke up crying horrified of myself for even dreaming relief at killing something so innocent.
I wanted to call Emma so badly, tell her my dream. And the worst part was I didn’t dare to call her. After she told me of her hypothesis about being pregnant I got so pissed at her I even had the nerve to throw her out off my own house, which is technically like her own house too. Now I had nobody to comfort me, to tell me everything was going to be ok.
I couldn’t even talk to Connor anymore. He had been calling me since yesterday, to check if I felt any better. I felt horrible lying to him and my brother telling them I was fine. I mean being pregnant wasn’t exactly on the top of my list for senior year, nor was it in it. Neither me nor Connor were ready or prepared to be parents. All I could think about was Connor, the baby; if it even existed, and me.
It was automatic my mind decided it so fast that before I knew it I was calling Emma. The phone rang four times before Emma picked it up. She was really sleepy when she answered.
“Em, it’s me Gabe. Look I know I kicked you out of my house and I’m sorry. I’m really, really sorry. Emma I’m so scrared and-” Emma cut me off and started talking.
“Gabe calm down,” she said with a soothing voice. And here I’d always thought I was the more mature one. “Tell me everything.” I started to tell her quickly about all my nightmares. She’d listen to me even though I knew she was kind of sleepy and soothed me when I started another round of tears. She was without doubt the best friend I could ever have.
“I don’t know what to do Em,” I said, as I finished telling her everything.
“I have an idea Gabe, but we’ll have to do it tomorrow,” Emma’s ideas have always scared me, but right now I was more scared at the idea of me being pregnant and having to tell my parents than anything else.
“Ok. Thanks Em,” I said, trying to calm myself a little bit.
“No problem Gabe,” she said, her voice as sweet as honey. “I’m sure that you would do the same for me.” After that we both hung up the phone.
Emma made me feel so much better, but I couldn’t go back to sleep just yet. So I decided to go to my bathroom. I went directly to the mirror to look at myself. I know I must have looked to somebody else like I was mentally retarded making an imaginary belly, but right now I didn’t care. If I was really pregnant I had to prepare myself mentally and emotionally. It was a complete failure though. I could never picture myself pregnant. Not at this age anyway.
I gave up really quick on the “preparing myself mentally” and went quickly to bed. When I placed my head on my pillows and looked at my left foot I noticed that I still had Mario’s bracelet. Well that was one thing that was going off if I really was pregnant.
After staring at ceiling again for like half an hour I decided to grab Connor’s boxers out of the closet. I know I may sound crazy and pathetic right now, but Connor’s boxers really helped me relax. It was like he was there holding me, so I wouldn’t crumble, like the other day when he was holding my hair while I puked.
I slowly started getting sleepy again, so I decided to hold Connor’s boxers tighter. I knew they wouldn’t go away, but it just made me feel better.

The next morning I felt horrible, actually I looked horrible too. I practically didn’t sleep anything and my eyes were so tired I thought that they might drop. And my hair looked like I hadn’t brushed it in weeks.
I got dressed really quickly, deciding for my lucky shorts and my favorite blue tank top. Since my hair was a total mess I decided to go with a high ponytail.
I wasn’t precisely hungry, so I decided not to have breakfast. I was really anxious about Emma’s plans, therefore I lost my appetite. It’s not that I don’t trust her. I do, not blindly but I do.
I couldn’t wait anymore. I grabbed my cell phone from the counter kitchen and dialed Emma’s number. It rang twice. When she picked up she was arguing with somebody.
“Yeah, you better get away from me you pervert!” she yelled at the top of her lungs. “Wait a sec Gabe,” she said quickly. She was asking a guy for something. I didn’t understand much of what she was saying for two reasons. One I wasn’t paying attention, and two she was talking way to fast. “Ok. Thanks,” she said before talking with me again. “Gabe I’m getting you a pregnancy test. I’ll be there in half an hour,” a pregnancy test? Shit I already peed. Thanks for the warning Emma.
“Em, can you buy more than one pee stick? Just to be sure,” I was definitely not going to take any chances.
“Sure. I’ll see you at the house Ok?” Then she hung up. I opened the fridge and grabbed a couple of bottles of water and started drinking them.
By the time Emma got home I was about to explode. I couldn’t wait a second longer. She ran up the stairs trying to hurry. I think she was also nervous. I hugged her when she came in my room. She was my life savior.
“Thanks Em. You’re the best,” I said. And it really was true.
“Back at you,” she said winking at me. “Look Gabe, no matter what happens with the test I want you to know that I’ll be here always. Like you have for me,” she smiled at me and gave me hug. I couldn’t have found a better friend in a million years. I was the luckiest.
“Thanks Em,” I smiled at her and crossed my fingers. “Wish me luck,” I said. She handed me the plastic bag with the tests. I took a deep breath and locked myself in the bathroom.
Emma had bought me five pregnancy tests. I was going to tell her that five weren’t enough, but I had to pee so badly that I didn’t bother. Five would just have to do.
I sat on the toilet opening each box and peeing on them. It didn’t take that long for me to finish. I even placed them in order as I peed on them. When I was done I opened the door and Emma came in.
“Ok. So we have to wait a couple of minutes,” I told her as we both read the instructions on the box. After we read the instructions I asked her why she was yelling at the pharmacy. She looked pissed when I asked her.
She told me anyways. Emma gave me a play by play at what happen at the pharmacy. “And can you believe the asshole pinched me in butt?” she maid a face of pure revulsion at remembering the pinch in the butt. “I mean the guy was old enough to be my father!” She shouted. I noticed that she had goose bumps. Poor Em, she went trough all that for me.
“Well I think it’s ready,” I said to Emma getting her out off my bed, so she can see that she was wrong all along.
“This is it,” she said crossing her fingers again for me.
I picked up the first test and saw the result; Positive. Ok. No reason to panic. Four more to go. I mean for all I knew that one was damaged. As I checked the second, third and fourth my hopes were going way, way down. When I saw the last test… I couldn’t take it anymore I started crying like I never did before.
I was so pissed at this stupid freaking pee test! I don’t know why but I found myself smacking the pee test in the bathroom sink. I was pregnant! I was like for real pregnant. I couldn’t believe it.

Emma was at my side soothing me now. “I’m so sorry,” she whispered. “Gabe, no offense, but smacking the pregnancy test wont do anything,” I laughed at that one, even though I only wanted to cry. I didn’t even want to imagine what my parents were going to think. Shit! Mom and dad. What do I do now? What can I say to them? Hey you know what mom? I’m pregnant! That will give my mom a heart attack.
Worst of all what do I do with Connor and Mario. I mean Connor seems to like being my friend and I’m not going to make him be with me by force. Making it seem like I did this on purpose. Mario on the other hand is going to hate me for life. Oh God! I don’t want to think anything anymore.
“Gabe, what are you going to do now?”

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Cynara wrote:Chapter 4: The Test!

I was staring at my ceiling. I couldn’t sleep anymore; I was afraid I was going to have another nightmare. Ever since Emma said that I could be pregnant I’ve been having all sorts of nightmares, the most recent one was me aborting the child. In my dream I actually felt relief, but then I started hearing noises: babies crying and even that little vacuum they use to get the baby out. I woke up crying horrified of myself for even dreaming relief at killing something so innocent.
I wanted to call Emma so badly, tell her my dream. And the worst part was I didn’t dare to call her. After she told me of her hypothesis about being pregnant I got so pissed at her I even had the nerve to throw her out off my own house, which is technically like her own house too. Now I had nobody to comfort me, to tell me everything was going to be ok.
I couldn’t even talk to Connor anymore. He had been calling me since yesterday, to check if I felt any better. I felt horrible lying to him and my brother telling them I was fine. I mean being pregnant wasn’t exactly on the top of my list for senior year, nor was it in it. Neither me nor Connor were ready or prepared to be parents. All I could think about was Connor, the baby; if it even existed, and me.
It was automatic my mind decided it so fast that before I knew it I was calling Emma. The phone rang four times before Emma picked it up. She was really sleepy when she answered.
“Em, it’s me Gabe. Look I know I kicked you out of my house and I’m sorry. I’m really, really sorry. Emma I’m so scrared and-” Emma cut me off and started talking.
“Gabe calm down,” she said with a soothing voice. And here I’d always thought I was the more mature one. “Tell me everything.” I started to tell her quickly about all my nightmares. She’d listen to me even though I knew she was kind of sleepy and soothed me when I started another round of tears. She was without doubt the best friend I could ever have.
“I don’t know what to do Em,” I said, as I finished telling her everything.
“I have an idea Gabe, but we’ll have to do it tomorrow,” Emma’s ideas have always scared me, but right now I was more scared at the idea of me being pregnant and having to tell my parents than anything else.
“Ok. Thanks Em,” I said, trying to calm myself a little bit.
“No problem Gabe,” she said, her voice as sweet as honey. “I’m sure that you would do the same for me.” After that we both hung up the phone.
Emma made me feel so much better, but I couldn’t go back to sleep just yet. So I decided to go to my bathroom. I went directly to the mirror to look at myself. I know I must have looked to somebody else like I was mentally retarded making an imaginary belly, but right now I didn’t care. If I was really pregnant I had to prepare myself mentally and emotionally. It was a complete failure though. I could never picture myself pregnant. Not at this age anyway.
I gave up really quick on the “preparing myself mentally” and went quickly to bed. When I placed my head on my pillows and looked at my left foot I noticed that I still had Mario’s bracelet. Well that was one thing that was going off if I really was pregnant.
After staring at ceiling again for like half an hour I decided to grab Connor’s boxers out of the closet. I know I may sound crazy and pathetic right now, but Connor’s boxers really helped me relax. It was like he was there holding me, so I wouldn’t crumble, like the other day when he was holding my hair while I puked.
I slowly started getting sleepy again, so I decided to hold Connor’s boxers tighter. I knew they wouldn’t go away, but it just made me feel better.

The next morning I felt horrible, actually I looked horrible too. I practically didn’t sleep anything and my eyes were so tired I thought that they might drop. And my hair looked like I hadn’t brushed it in weeks.
I got dressed really quickly, deciding for my lucky shorts and my favorite blue tank top. Since my hair was a total mess I decided to go with a high ponytail.
I wasn’t precisely hungry, so I decided not to have breakfast. I was really anxious about Emma’s plans, therefore I lost my appetite. It’s not that I don’t trust her. I do, not blindly but I do.
I couldn’t wait anymore. I grabbed my cell phone from the counter kitchen and dialed Emma’s number. It rang twice. When she picked up she was arguing with somebody.
“Yeah, you better get away from me you pervert!” she yelled at the top of her lungs. “Wait a sec Gabe,” she said quickly. She was asking a guy for something. I didn’t understand much of what she was saying for two reasons. One I wasn’t paying attention, and two she was talking way to fast. “Ok. Thanks,” she said before talking with me again. “Gabe I’m getting you a pregnancy test. I’ll be there in half an hour,” a pregnancy test? Shit I already peed. Thanks for the warning Emma.
“Em, can you buy more than one pee stick? Just to be sure,” I was definitely not going to take any chances.
“Sure. I’ll see you at the house Ok?” Then she hung up. I opened the fridge and grabbed a couple of bottles of water and started drinking them.
By the time Emma got home I was about to explode. I couldn’t wait a second longer. She ran up the stairs trying to hurry. I think she was also nervous. I hugged her when she came in my room. She was my life savior.
“Thanks Em. You’re the best,” I said. And it really was true.
“Back at you,” she said winking at me. “Look Gabe, no matter what happens with the test I want you to know that I’ll be here always. Like you have for me,” she smiled at me and gave me hug. I couldn’t have found a better friend in a million years. I was the luckiest.
“Thanks Em,” I smiled at her and crossed my fingers. “Wish me luck,” I said. She handed me the plastic bag with the tests. I took a deep breath and locked myself in the bathroom.
Emma had bought me five pregnancy tests. I was going to tell her that five weren’t enough, but I had to pee so badly that I didn’t bother. Five would just have to do.
I sat on the toilet opening each box and peeing on them. It didn’t take that long for me to finish. I even placed them in order as I peed on them. When I was done I opened the door and Emma came in.
“Ok. So we have to wait a couple of minutes,” I told her as we both read the instructions on the box. After we read the instructions I asked her why she was yelling at the pharmacy. She looked pissed when I asked her.
She told me anyways. Emma gave me a play by play at what happen at the pharmacy. “And can you believe the asshole pinched me in butt?” she maid a face of pure revulsion at remembering the pinch in the butt. “I mean the guy was old enough to be my father!” She shouted. I noticed that she had goose bumps. Poor Em, she went trough all that for me.
“Well I think it’s ready,” I said to Emma getting her out off my bed, so she can see that she was wrong all along.
“This is it,” she said crossing her fingers again for me.
I picked up the first test and saw the result; Positive. Ok. No reason to panic. Four more to go. I mean for all I knew that one was damaged. As I checked the second, third and fourth my hopes were going way, way down. When I saw the last test… I couldn’t take it anymore I started crying like I never did before.
I was so pissed at this stupid freaking pee test! I don’t know why but I found myself smacking the pee test in the bathroom sink. I was pregnant! I was like for real pregnant. I couldn’t believe it.

Emma was at my side soothing me now. “I’m so sorry,” she whispered. “Gabe, no offense, but smacking the pregnancy test wont do anything,” I laughed at that one, even though I only wanted to cry. I didn’t even want to imagine what my parents were going to think. Shit! Mom and dad. What do I do now? What can I say to them? Hey you know what mom? I’m pregnant! That will give my mom a heart attack.
Worst of all what do I do with Connor and Mario. I mean Connor seems to like being my friend and I’m not going to make him be with me by force. Making it seem like I did this on purpose. Mario on the other hand is going to hate me for life. Oh God! I don’t want to think anything anymore.
“Gabe, what are you going to do now?”

but then I started hearing noises: babies crying and even that little vacuum they use to get the baby out.

Maybe describe the noise of the vacuum. Is it a whirring sound, a buzzing sound? Personally, I don't know, but describing the noise it made would make it easier to picture.

I woke up crying horrified of myself for even dreaming relief at killing something so innocent.

A comma needed in there somewhere. Maybe after "crying" And is it "of" or "at" because I think "at" might sound better.

And the worst part was I didn’t dare to call her.

I don't think you need the "and"

After she told me of her hypothesis about being pregnant I got so pissed at her I even had the nerve to throw her out off my own house, which is technically like her own house too.

Hypothesis? Doesn't sound the right word here. Theory? And maybe say "...about me being..." because otherwise it sounds like Emma thinks she's the one pregnant. A double bummer? :S And in the last chapter I got the impression they were in the car. Maybe you'd want to mention them going in the house, or her bedroom.

I felt horrible lying to him and my brother telling them I was fine.

Them? Maybe just "everyone" but this sentence is a little confusing.

I mean being pregnant wasn’t exactly on the top of my list for senior year, nor was it in it.

Comma after "I mean"

It was automatic my mind decided it so fast that before I knew it I was calling Emma.

What? "It was so automatic, my mind..." ? Maybe get rid of the "my mind decided it so fast" <- confusing.

“Em, it’s me Gabe. Look I know I kicked you out of my house and I’m sorry. I’m really, really sorry. Emma I’m so scrared and-”

Commas! One after "it's me" And after "Look" Then another after "Emma" Plus, I think you mean "scared" but that's just a typo.

She’d listen to me even though I knew she was kind of sleepy

She listened to me? Or seeing as you're not writing in past tense hen "she listens to me"

“I don’t know what to do Em,” I said

Comma after "do"

“I have an idea Gabe,

Comma after "idea"

“No problem Gabe,”

Comma after "problem"

...mentally retarded making...

Scrap this. If you plan to make this into a book, people would get seriously offeneded. When are people not? Strange, weird, a total freak. ?

Well that was one thing that was going off if I really was pregnant.

Comma after "well"

I wasn’t precisely hungry

Scrap "precisely" replace with "very" or "that"

I do, not blindly but I do.

Comma after "blindly" I think :S

“Yeah, you better get away from me you pervert!”

Comma after "me"

“Wait a sec Gabe,”

Comma after "sec"

One I wasn’t paying attention, and two she was talking way to fast.

Meh, doesn't fit in... Maybe "one was" ? "the first being she was... ... and the second she was..."

Gabe I’m getting you a pregnancy test

Comma after "Gabe"

Just to be sure,” I was definitely

Full-stop not comma. It's not a speech tag.

Shit I already peed. Thanks for the warning Emma.

Comma after "shit" and comma after "warning"

I’ll see you at the house Ok?”

Comma after "house"

I opened the fridge and grabbed a couple of bottles of water and started drinking them.

Ha! clever and funny, good.

Okay, that's all I have time for right now. Could you PM me if I don't finish it in a few days. Sorry, I will finish my review! Just ... not yet

Once again it was great, you've improved a lot. Most of the mistakes were just commas, easily sorted out.

Please PM me if I don't finish my review in a few days!

~EmmaJane~

hey!

Oh man! She's pregnant! You had great descriptions, and made the characteristics of Gabe and Em really come out, showing that Gabe is usually very cautious and Em is a loyal friend. Poor Gabe! I can't wait to see how Connor reacts... and Mario. You have a very interesting story going on. The ending was great, it keeps me wanting more!

~Dommy

Hey there wookielover here! I have to say: Wow It is awsome!!! I've read all the chapters and there amazing!!! This one was my favorite!!! Smacking the test against the counter was hilarious!!!! I don't know if it's just me but she seems moody already! Anyway awsome story!!! It's kindda sad that she's pregnant. Poor girl!!!! Well I don't like that you left me in suspense!!! That was mean!!! All and all it was awsome!!! Brava!!!!!!!! Bye!!!!!!!

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May the force be with you...

This is very good! I would only do a couple of things diffrent. Describe maybe how she got pregnant, very briefly of course, and also maybe describe how the baby will ruin some of her plans. Also adding a bit more description will be good too. Over all the story itself is very good.

Sparkle