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Prologue.
The sky was dark, lined heavily with thick, black clouds that cried out thin, cold droplets. The world below became victimised by the downpour. A flame of auburn hair was no exception. The once bright, shoulder length locks were dulled to an ugly grey by the saturation. Water rolled along the soft ridges of the face beneath the mat of hair, whose eyes remained fixated on the insane swishing of the trees that lined the footpath. Her uniform clung to her like a child and the heavy bag on her back tugged at her shoulders. All she could feel was pain. Her back hurt from the weight. Her skin stung all over from the cold. A headache paraded around her skull like a madi gras. She tried to think of a way she could possibly get home without collapsing under the stress, but she saw no hope. If only she had brought her umbrella. Slowly pressing her Colorado school shoes into a shallow pool nestled in a crack in the pavement, she began her trek. From behind her, a soft, familiar voice chimed out her name. The rain stopped falling on her head. She looked up only to notice there was a plain, black umbrella being held above her. She turned to see who had been so compassionate. Her eyes widened with surprise when she noticed who it was, and her heart skipped a beat...
-I've had a brain wave and have decided to re-write this story in 1st person. The first few chapters may set it up as cliche, but I plan to turn it around entirely. Bare with me here.
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