Honestly I did't like it that much. The characters really had no time to develope and it seems they jump right to it which is sort of unrealistic and not what I saw as "love" or romantic. But besides the grammar and thaat fact the dialogue and words were realistic and had a certain flow I think this would work if it was developed correctly. I think this should be the middle last part not the beginning seeing as the title is the third paragraph. I am not into those shallow love stories anyway I think they are way to young. lol
This was really just adorable! How everything just flowed really nice and the moment leading up to them kissing was perfectly written! PM me if you write more!
"Woe to the man whose heart has not learned while young to hope, to love—and to put his trust in life." ~ Joseph Conrad
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