uh...wow. it was definitely strange but i'll say unique. lol!
the mother-daughter theme is very unusual like kitty15 said, but that's what makes a story good, it's different from all the others!
work on the dialouge, and the story will be faultless!
You know, when I read this, I jstu tell you are a poet. It has that... you know, present tense, wonderful imagery, that sort of thing. I really don't know what to say, just to keep going!
Man, when you decide to violate people's comfort zones, you do an excellent job! Incest, child abuse, AND parent abuse. This is great work; edgy and very well written. I didn't see any mistakes. Great job and YES continue!
There's no such thing as writer's block. That was invented by people out in California who couldn't write.
-Terry Pratchett-
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