*bows* Thanks for reading. It's been fun.
^_^ Keek out!
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you need to fix some parts in your writings. sometimes there are just pieces of a word in sentence. on some words your forget like three letters. one time you used he when describing you character
you rushed way too fast throught the part when Evelyn was captured. you lacked in detail and suspense. they just kind of caught her and put her in the tube.
I'm also not sure where the plot is going. does evelyns's story end here, or is there more?
i would give this a 6/10
If I was bold, I might have jus moved so I could see the board
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