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Wow! I totally love this! My only question is what exactly does a werewolf look like? Other than that I think this is really wonderful. Good going!

LOVE --ULTRAVIOLET

Hi W-Lupus! This was an interesting story, and I thought it was more unique than other werewolf stories. I also liked how you mixed in a scientific explanation. The only part that confused me was how you kept changing tenses. Is it in past tense or present tense? For instance, sometimes you wrote something along the lines of "I said" and another time you put "I say". Choose a tense and stick with it. One more thing that I found:

I start to clean the boys wounds, the dried blood had begun to turn the water red, which ran like veins over the cave floor.

Again with the tenses. You put "I start" (present tense) and "ran" (past tense). Also, put a semicolon between "wounds" and "the", or just start a new sentence entirely. All in all, this story really interested me, and I can't wait to read more! PM me when you post more!

ultraviolet wrote:Wow! I totally love this! My only question is what exactly does a werewolf look like? Other than that I think this is really wonderful. Good going!

LOVE --ULTRAVIOLET

thanks! Your question has just made me realise i need to put a description of one in here. ^^

Earthfire713 wrote:Hi W-Lupus! This was an interesting story, and I thought it was more unique than other werewolf stories. I also liked how you mixed in a scientific explanation. The only part that confused me was how you kept changing tenses. Is it in past tense or present tense? For instance, sometimes you wrote something along the lines of "I said" and another time you put "I say". Choose a tense and stick with it. One more thing that I found:

I start to clean the boys wounds, the dried blood had begun to turn the water red, which ran like veins over the cave floor.

Again with the tenses. You put "I start" (present tense) and "ran" (past tense). Also, put a semicolon between "wounds" and "the", or just start a new sentence entirely. All in all, this story really interested me, and I can't wait to read more! PM me when you post more!

thanks for pointing that out! very helpful. I tend to not use this site alot , and i have more of this story on my devaintART page. I'll pm you though if i put more up here.

It looks like the wolves are taking over! Hey W-Lupus nice meeting ya, I'm curious by the way. This is ver interesting and I like to read more, so if you didn't mind when you add more can you PM, please and Thank you in advanvce. Keep writing and thank you for the read.