hi. I enjoyed this but, (not to sound to mean), i didn't really get the point. All that happened was the fact that she kept eating and eating and that she had a strange dream. I saw a few things that need editing:
I was on the rode again
Road
she had finally made across the state border into Illinois. It wouldn't take long to get to Evansville- it was just on the edge of Indiana.
here you switched from 1st to 2nd person
all in all it was an okay story. Good work keep it up.
Everybody wants to go to heaven; but nobody wants to die.
Go and make interesting mistakes, make amazing mistakes, make glorious and fantastic mistakes. Break rules. Leave the world more interesting for your being here. — Neil Gaiman
