I finally worked up the patience to finish this chapter and post it. As some of you may recall, I plan on turning this fan-fiction into a graphic novel. I wanted some critiques about the actually story before I began, though. So, anyway, on to the story.This chapter, I think, didn't turn out as well as it could have. It seems to be a good length for the information, and I like the way the characters are introduced... but it seems a bit "description heavy." If you see what I mean, do you know of anyway to fix it.
DISCLAIMER: I do not own Warriors. It is copyrighted to HarperCollins and Erin Hunter.)
Chapter One-- Tensions
Eaglefeather yawned, fighting to stay awake as the GorseClan patrol wove through the dark forest, heading for the Shallow Pool, where the gathering would be held. He glanced sideways at his friend, Startail, as she flicked his ear with the tip of her tail.
“I wonder what the punishment for falling asleep at a gathering would be?” she teased lightly.
“I’ll be fine. And besides,” he cuffed her gently around the ear, claws sheathed. “If I fell asleep, I’d miss everything!”
“Same old Eaglepaw,” Falconwing’s voice rang behind them.
“Eaglefeather,” Startail corrected him, rolling her eyes.
“Keep up you three!” Moontail’s yowl snapped them back to attention. The black-and-white deputy was waiting for them near the stream that separated GorseClan territory from SwiftClan territory. It was GorseClan’s only path to get to the Shallow Pool, and it meant crossing through an unknown forest. “We haven’t got all night!”
Falconwing and Startail glanced at each other, amusement in their eyes, before speeding forward to catch up to their Clanmates. Eaglefeather followed, pelt bristled with excitement. He had only been made a warrior the day before, along with Startail and Falconwing. This would be his first gathering as a true member of GorseClan. He couldn’t help but wonder if the Clans would be as big as the last time he had gone to a gathering, in late greenleaf. There had been more cats than he could have ever imagined there! Now that it was Leaf-fall, he doubted that the other two leaders would send many cats out. Prey was always scarce in this season, and it took its toll on every Clan.
Stepping over the border, Eaglefeather wrinkled his nose at the scent of SwiftClan. It disgusted him. And getting his belly fur wet, he wasn’t too fond of either. However, currents in the stream were gentler than they had been earlier this season, so it was easy to stay on his paws. Upon reaching the bank, he shook his pelt, spattering Jaystripe, who had come up behind him, with a shower of water droplets.
“Hey!” she hissed. “Watch it!”
“Sorry, Jaystripe.” Eaglefeather hung his head in embarrassment. Jaystripe was a senior warrior, and a well-respected cat to all three Clans.
Jaystripe glared at him for a moment more, then continued on ahead.
“Don’t worry about Jaystripe,” Whitefoot mewed in his ear. “She’s been snapping at everyone lately. Rabbitdash thinks her age is getting to her.”
Eaglefeather laughed, turning to the orange she-cat, whose paws were the color of snow. “She isn’t that old is she?”
“She’s probably older than the Sky Oak!” Whitefoot joked softly.
“I heard that!” Jaystripe called back, making Whitefoot jump.
“Her hearing sure isn’t failing,” Eaglefeather mewed, smiling. He started forward again, Whitefoot following him.
Not too long after, the Shallow Pool came into view, its clear water glittering with the reflection of the full moon. Eaglefeather marveled at how beautiful the whole location was. The GorseClan cats padded down the grassy slope into the hollow where the pool lay, and spread out, each cat going to their own little groups. Eaglefeather, with Startail and Falconwing, spotted a dark brown tabby she-cat across the pool, and trotted over.
“Owlpaw!” Startail greeted her.
Owlpaw turned her head. “It’s actually Owlclaw now.”
“You’re a warrior too?” Falconwing asked. “That’s great! I’m Falconwing.”
“Startail,” Startail dipped her head. She nodded towards Eaglefeather. “And Eaglepaw is now Eaglefeather.”
“Those are great names,” Owlclaw purred, her tail curling neatly over her white paws. Her ears perked. “Have you heard yet?”
“Heard what?” Eaglefeather tilted his head.
“SwiftClan has been stealing prey from SunClan.”
“What?” Startail’s ears flattened.
“It’s true!” Owlclaw insisted. “I went out on a border patrol not too long ago. We caught three SwiftClan cats on our side of the border. They had only managed to catch a rabbit, but still, they shouldn’t have even been there! Plus, the dawn patrol this morning reported scenting them near the border again!”
“You don’t think something’s wrong, do you?” Startail sounded sympathetic, almost worried for the cats of SwiftClan.
“Who cares?” Falconwing’s claws flexed. “If they’ve been stealing prey, they need to be punished!”
“You’re not suggested that SunClan attack them, are you?” Eaglefeather raised an eyebrow. But before Falconwing could reply, a yowl cut through the air, silencing every cat.
“Let the gathering begin!” Emberstar, the dark gray leader of SwiftClan called out, her blue eyes blazing in the dim light. Eaglefeather could almost see a fire burning in her mind. Once every cat was paying attention, she nodded for Snowstar to speak first.
Snowstar stepped forward, taking his place in the center of the wide, tall stone— the Great Stone—where the leaders shared events. “All has been peaceful in GorseClan, despite the cooling air. We have three new warriors, who are all present here tonight: Eaglefeather, Startail, and Falconwing.”
“Eaglefeather! Startail! Falconwing!” Sageheart and Lizardpaw of SunClan began to chant the new warriors’ names, and the entire group of cats soon joined them. There were yowls of approval among the crowd. When all had quieted down, the GorseClan leader continued.
“We also have two new apprentices, though only one was chosen to go tonight. Lionpaw is here, while Leafpaw is still in camp.” Snowstar paused yet again for praise. “Two sunrises ago, Moontail and his patrol spotted a fox living on the GorseClan border with SwiftClan.” He turned to Emberstar. “I am warning you of this now.”
Emberstar’s only reply was a twitch of her whiskers. When Snowstar stepped back, she motioned for Goldenstar, the leader of SunClan, to step forward. A glare flashed across her scarred face as he stood. It was gone within an instant.
The golden tabby tom nodded to Snowstar as he passed him, replacing the other leader in the center of the stone. “SunClan also has new warriors: Owlclaw and Finchfoot.” There were yowls of approval once more. Eaglefeather could see Finchfoot, the brown-and-black tom he had known from the many border skirmishes with SunClan, standing up, his chest puffed out boldly. Owlclaw, he noticed, looked rather embarrassed to have every cat cheering for her.
When all was quiet, the leader went on, only reporting that prey had been plentiful, and that a new litter of kits had been born. Now, it was Emberstar’s turn to speak. Taking her place, she let every cat quiet down before yowling out the words, “Prey-stealers!”
Her accusation hung in the air for a few heartbeats before cats began to growl and hiss.
“Silence!” Snowstar roared. He turned to face Emberstar. “Care to explain, Emberstar?”
“SunClan,” the SwiftClan leader announced, flicking her tail in Goldenstar’s direction. “Have been trespassing on SwiftClan territory.”
“We have not!” SunClan’s deputy, Vinenose snarled from below the leaders. “You must have bees in your brain!”
“Hush, Vinenose.” Goldenstar scolded the she-cat. He turned to gaze to the SwiftClan leader again. Calmly, he mewed, “I assure you, Emberstar, my Clanmates have not come close to your territory. And if they have—” He paused, letting the words sink in. “Then I haven’t been told so.”
“He didn’t even mention that they’re the prey-stealers!” Owlclaw hissed in Eaglefeather’s ear.
“The last thing the Clans need now is a fight,” Eaglefeather replied in a low voice, eyes still on the Great Stone. “He’s trying to keep things as peaceful as they are now.”
“The least he could do is put up a fight about it,” Owlclaw muttered, ears twitching. He had to admit that the SunClan warrior had a point.
“No! I refuse to believe that!” Eaglefeather heard Emberstar growl, turning his attention back to the leaders. “This gathering is over!”
Emberstar leaped down from the Great Stone, landing neatly on her paws, tail lashing. She glared at Goldenstar for only a moment more, then let a yowl, signaling for her Clanmates to follow her. After sharing unsure expressions, the SwiftClan cats stood, and bounded after their leader. They disappeared over the hills. Eaglefeather could hear the remaining cats muttering amongst themselves. And why wouldn’t they? It wasn’t normal for a Clan to leave a gathering early, and without sharing recent events.
“The moon!” a cat called out. “It’s not covered!”
All heads turned to the sky. Eaglefeather’s eyes widened. Were StarClan... approving of this? He shook his head. No, that can’t possibly be it… can it? Confused, he rose to his paws, nodding a quick goodbye to Owlclaw before heading back over to his Clanmates.
Falconwing came up behind, Startail following. “Do you think they’ll be a battle? I haven’t seen a good fight in moons!”
Startail cuffed him around the ear, and Eaglefeather could tell that she was fighting to keep her claws sheathed. “How can you say that?! The last thing any Clan needs in Leaf-fall is a war.”
“Startail’s right,” Moontail’s meow made the young warriors glance in his direction. “Especially since prey is unusually scarce this year.”
“That must be why Owlclaw was so upset.” Falconwing commented, sounding guilty for being mouse-brained. “SunClan live in the grasslands. If the rabbits have all gone in their burrows, they must be starving.”
“We’ll do no good talking about it.” Moontail said after a moment’s pause. He narrowed his eyes and trotted ahead. “Come on. The problem won’t be dealt with until it affects GorseClan. Until then, there will be no plans to enter either territory.”
Eaglefeather let the others go ahead of him. His paws dragged as he thought over the night’s worrying events. He couldn’t help but feel that something big was coming as he saw Goldenstar lead SunClan out of the hollow.
(Feel free to butcher it however you like.
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