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eh. It was actually not bad, although I am stongly opposed to H/HR. The writing was very welld one, and it flowed quite well. You had all the character pinned quite nicely. A few things I found that I couldn't believe was the whole singing dancing part, and when Hermione said her cousin made her take pole dancing lessons. But other then that, it wasn't that bad.
8/10

That is soooooooo sick.Is ron and Hermione,not Harry and Hermione!

I liked it. I was expecting something that followed the plot of the Harry Potter books and when that didn't happen I was so pleased. I mean other than pyhsical descriptions, Ron's accent and the names of the characters you basically created a whole new story. But I like the spin on the characters, it makes them different people. It would be interesting how Ron would react to this situation had he been sober since it seems in the original books that he has a thing for Hermoine. And Summerless said something about Harry and Ginny having children together. If that were the case wouldn't these new feelings for Hermoine put a big spin on things. But I loved what you did with your "whim". Very good job.

Good job...I really liked it, but I never really expect harry thinking that way about Hermione
I like the way ron sounded like him...u know the mate thing also the accent made him sound drunk
it made me laugh a couple of times.....good job!

This was a very good piece.

What you need to do:

more talk.

less script-like

better work

WHAT YOU HAVE:

alto

a plot

discription

alot of other things

Now if you look at these, and improve, you can do this. TRUST ME

MATT

All i can say is wow. I'm all for the Harry and Ginny thing but in the beginning i thought Hermione and Harry were definitely going to hook up so I don't really have anything against it. I can't really see them singing those songs because they are muggle songs. They probaly would sing a Weird Sisters song or something like that. Over all this is a great fan fiction