Okay, so this is my 1st post of Heartbeat and I really haven't gone through all of it to find all of the spelling mistakes and stuff, but I really want some feedback.
I had no clue where I was when I woke up in that alley. My head hurt really bad and I felt so weak that i couldn't get up. I forced myself to stand up and remember why I was in that alley. I remembered what I did yesterday. I went to Millennium Park with Aden and then we went to a pizza place, but I couldn’t remember what I did today and why I was sleeping in this nasty, smelly alley. Then it hit me like an eighteen wheeler; One Black Rose. That stupid play I went to see with Kerry and Vince. But how did I end up in this alley? I remembered arriving at the theater in our limo and I remembered going into the theater. I went up to our balcony and waited for Kerry and Vince to finish mingling with all those rich people that they call ‘friends’. The play was really awful, but the cover of the playbill looked really cool. It was a picture of a black rose and it was bleeding. Wait,that was it! My playbill! I was walking to our limo and a wind took my playbill! I collect playbills so I really wanted it. I was starting to remember why I was in this nasty alley. My playbill got blown here and I passed out for some reason. Why did I pass out? Then, I remembered everything; the blood, the fangs, and even the face.
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