OK, heres my drift. It was very good, one of the few stories I actually read (I usually read poems because I can stay awake long enough to finish ) Like you said, it was a little strange, but in some cases, like this one, strange can be a good thing. I didn't see any mistakes, although I don't know why you think spying is perverted (not that I see that as a mistake), and I don't know how anyone cannot be addicted to doughnuts!
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