this is a story that's set in future times, so it's a sci-fi, but it's also fantasy, so i just put it in A/A.
anyways, it's called The Magic of Chocolate, and here's chapter one. comments and edits wanted.
Okay, I edited it, so here's the new, edited, longer version of Chap. 1.
One <^> Chocolate Bar
“Dark or milk?” the receptionist at ‘The Center of Chocolate’ asked the young man.
“Milk,” the dark-haired man replied, “always milk.” The room was dark, and he shifted uncomfortably. Anything could be hiding in the shadows. He doubted that anyone would be hiding from outside The Center of Chocolate, with its high—yet invisible—security, but he had learned never to trust anyone, especially with his line of work. He was always alert and ready.
He glanced around as the older lady reached down to grab a piece of the chocolate. The only light in the room was one on the wall behind the desk, and the small bluish light from the computer. He smelled nothing in the room but chocolate, a heavy, sweet perfume. He looked back at the lady.
The lady held something in her hand, and the man could barely see its outline. “Do you have money?” asked the lady.
“Here.” The man reached into his pocket and pulled out a stack of bills. It seemed like a lot to pay for a candy bar, especially one as small as this. And—as if that wasn’t enough—if you could have seen the number on the bills, you would have been surprised at the seeming idiocy of buying a small piece of chocolate for that. It wouldn’t matter how rare it was. But the man needed the bar. It wasn’t an addiction… it would probably save his life.
The lady took the money and handed him the chocolate. He ripped open the wrapper and ate the chocolate in a single bite. After pouring the chocolate crumbs into his mouth, he carelessly threw the wrapper onto the ground.
After he left, the receptionist sighed, stood up and walked over to pick up the wrapper. Whoever’s replacing me should be here by now, she thought.
thanks for comments!! i'll have the second and third chapters up in a few minutes.
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