I was assigned to write a descriptive essay in school last year and i won a prize for the best in my class... out of the girls. so, i guess that was pretty cool. lol. Anyway, i re-read this yesterday and kinda liked it. I am thinking about addding it to part of my book. hmm? so, tell me what you think.
The halls were filled with thousands of echoes from the many teenagers laughing and talking with their friends. Lockers slammed, people shouted, cell phones beeped and rang, but all the disturbing noise was unnoticed to Mariah as she glanced around frantically. She spotted the man and his sinister eyes met hers, fear piercing through her whole body. She turned to run, tripping over a book that had been tossed carelessly to the ground. Swearing silently, she brushed the hair from her face and stood up. Glancing around, the man was no where in sight. She saw Emma laughing happily with Ben as he imitated a character from his favorite movie. She saw Zavior, his huge height towering above everyone around him as he searched his locker for a pen. Carly was talking with Jen near the restrooms, her face flushed with excitement. Mariah had to leave. They wanted her and if she left, no one else would be harmed.
Running towards the nearest exit, her heart started to pound frantically. The door was locked. Looking around, she realized she was stuck in the sickly hot building. The lights went out, the hallway darkening slightly, a hint of fear emerging from the teens. But within seconds, all was forgotten as the loud conversations built up again. Perspiration formed on Mariah’s pale face and she looked frantically around. The humidity was too much for her. She wiped sweat from her brow as she craved a cool crisp breeze. She saw Zavior looking at her curiously before his expression changed to concern. He walked towards her, his long legs carrying him quickly past the yapping high school students. Her name was called and she heard it distantly before everything surrounding her started to spin out of control. Fear. Darkness. Nothing.
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“What the…” Xavier said as her body fell forward into his arms. He glanced frantically around, looking for his friends. “Ben, Emma!”His voice boomed through the hall, causing several heads to turn in curiosity.
“What happened to her?” Emma’s voice was full of concern as she rushed toward them, putting her hand to Mariah’s for-head. “She passed out? Why?”
“We need to get her to fresh air,” Ben said, looking at the West door. “Xavier, pick her up. We’ll bring her outside.” Gently, Xavier lifted Mariah up and followed Emma and Ben to the door.
“Why the heck is this door locked?” Ben said angrily as he tried to open it, without success.
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Slowly, her eyes opened and she looked up into Xavier’s strained face, confused. “Did I faint?” No one answered. Memories started to come back to her and Mariah gasped. “Xavier, set me down now.” Her voice was so severe, he obeyed immediately. Standing, she looked at her three best friends and her voice shook as she said, “Go hide somewhere. Quick.” Several terrified screams rang through the halls and Mariah shuddered. She was too late. It had started.
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