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Sat Nov 26, 2011 7:37 am
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Sat Nov 26, 2011 8:30 am
barefootrunner says...



This is a really good piece -- I can't complain in any way: No typos, no spelling mistakes... It is all so sad. I loved the mood, the way you made readers care about the characters, the style in which you wrote and everything! The end was an absolute knockout blow -- this is a fantastic piece of writing in every way. Great work!
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I always knew that deep down in every human heart, there is mercy and generosity. No one is born hating another person because of the color of his skin, or his background, or his religion. People must learn to hate, and if they can learn to hate, they can be taught to love, for love comes more naturally to the human heart than its opposite.
— Nelson Mandela, Long Walk to Freedom