Young Writers Society

Thank you the Writers! Yeah, I'll be sure to fix up those weaknesses. I like your quote btw. It reminded me of the original Peter Pan written by J.M Barrie.

Goes a little like this:

Captain James Hook: Prepare to die, Peter Pan!
Peter Pan: To die would be a Grand Adventure!

Wow, I really liked this No, it wasn't very creepy, but it was interesting! I hope you write more of this!

-Rach

Thanks Rach! I'm thinking about expanding it...we'll see! ^^

Right I would just like to say I did really enjoy this. You told it really well.
I enjoyed the part where she is talking to kids from her bedroom window, I found it quite sad yet eery at the same time and the part where she stabs the girl is quite graphic and horrifying, I liked it .
Although the fact that you left it open ended peeved me off to be honest; I would like to see you follow up on this story because you and the piece itself. Show us why the robot was made? Why it was put with a family? What happens to it now that it has murdered?
PM me when you do

This story reminds me of one with a similar line,except that it was a poem.

The kid was around the same age.She too was forbidden to leave the house because she had some sort of sunlight allergy.

About the story...I liked the concept of the Human robot child.Not exactly a very scary story though.

Hey Rlw92! Thanks for reading. I'm glad you like it. I'll be sure to tell you when I update this.

Thanks for reading Young Gun!! Too bad it's not scary. That's something else I'm itching to fix.

Hmm very dark but I am used to things like that and can usually spot stuff coming so wasn’t really scared by what happened. This reminds me of the old TV program Stargate SG1 was that were you got inspiration because they are very similar? I think you could have described the interior of the house and statue more however.

All the best.

Thanks for reading! Nope, I don't watch stargate. I wrote this in the middle of writing a paper. Took me ten minutes to write, which is why it needs some work.