Young Writers Society

Here is some random picture I done... to be honest... it's alright...





Mistakes:

• The belly button is way too high up.
• The knees are totally messed.
• The mouth looks... gay.

The shoulder things.... have pads in them... I have decided... x]

And more... I just don't want to mention it! Hehe... I am.. quite proud of it... O___o well.... I was before I coloured it in!

Here's the coloured version:



Meh... *hides*

Yeah the knees are screwed up because they're too large.
Yes the mouth does look gay.

But it looks great! I like it, aside from the few obvious flaws.
Im out of time right now, gotta go eat breakfast.
Ill crit this when I get back.

Edit: your title said "question?", But I see no question!

Q for you!

-She needs bigger/wider hips, that skirt is gonna rip.

-More body curves, the waist, torso, hip... etc.

-Make the knees smaller, but dont make the join smaller. Its hard to explain, but the knee isnt the whole thing, so dont draw it as the whole thing.

this is good, i agree with sponson, another thing is that the jaw seems a bit mishapen.

but overall this is pretty good job, and it reminds me again how i cant draw girls....

Hey, cute drawing.

One problem with the jaw is that it need to be inline with the face. Oh, and she has some big deltoids. She's SHAQQING! (You know...Shaq. The basketball player. Shaqquile O'Neal, I guess. I'm not sure how to spell it...)

Sponson covered most of the critiquing.

Deltoids are shoulder muscles, by the way. Not saying you wouldn't know that. But just in case...

Keep it up!

Awesome, and beyond what's been said, the clothes look really wrinkly.

She forgot to iron her shirt.

And yeah... Well, I'm proud of it... I like the colouring... a bit... x] Thanks. And yeah! I was trying to get curvy hips but I failed and like, messed it up. It's hard. x]

i actually like the wrikilyness of clothes on some girls and stuff for reasons i dont know about...

Ok Im pretty sure I didnt cover all the crits.
Why is it always "Sponson covered it all"?

That is great! I don't really draw people...because I can't. I normally draw dragons so my people compared to yours will definately show that mine belong in a paper shredder. The hands are pretty good (I stink at them) and the coloring is awesome. (I ruin all of mine if I try to color them.)

Sponson Light wrote:Ok Im pretty sure I didnt cover all the crits.
Why is it always "Sponson covered it all"?

Because you do normally cover it all? Well... everything that needs to be fixed? :-s

you need to work on the knees cause they look odd but the colouring is great, and helped a lot by the inking which i think is also pretty good. overall i think this is a great job, especially as i cant draw people at all!

keep it up emz!

~KayJuran~

The colors could use different colors.

Have you learned the color wheel yet?
Complimentary colors?
Red and Green?

Blue and Orange?

My art teacher says shade with complimentary colors, so if the skirt is blue, add some orange to the shading.

One boob is a little bigger than the other...