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Wed Dec 28, 2005 7:43 pm
deleted6 says...



I copied this out a book on how to draw manga originally but i changed it vastly

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Wed Dec 28, 2005 7:48 pm
Sponson Light says...



Whats the stuff around his legs?
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Wed Dec 28, 2005 7:49 pm
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Shadow, very badly drawn shadow.
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Wed Dec 28, 2005 7:51 pm
Sponson Light says...



Less scribbles, more concisive strokes.
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Wed Dec 28, 2005 8:07 pm
zelithon says...



Perhaps try traceing it or coppying it exactly first. :P

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Wed Dec 28, 2005 8:13 pm
Jennafina says...



^^^ Evil opinionated critiquer, lol.

I like his face. It looks very expressive, I think its in the eyebrows maybe? Or the moulth? Probably a combo. Like Sponsen said, it would look better if you were to even out your strokes in the shading. The coloring looks nice though. Very vibrant.

I think its funny that he's in a suit.
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Wed Dec 28, 2005 11:06 pm
electricbluemonkey says...



Wow, nice...umm, shadow thing...

But I'd say its the best thing you've ever drawn (and shown us).

Really...
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Wed Dec 28, 2005 11:34 pm
Snoink says...



The devil looks fat, lol. Because you've made the buttons on his shirt go like "(" it makes him look very chubby. XD
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Thu Dec 29, 2005 1:58 am
Elizabeth says...



Hmm... I can see it better now... and I kind of have to aggree with Snoink, love.
It is weird though, his head is turned towards the right but his shirt buttons are going to the left... (O_O) It also appears as if his shirt doesn't reach inside his pants... I mean, like, his shirt is too small at the bottom or the top of the pants are too large...

Ahh, I was never one to look at how to books...

It's improved from the others though. :D That's good!
  





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Fri Dec 30, 2005 6:42 pm
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I also have a how to draw manga book by christaphor hart. It's pretty good but it was after that when I decided that I like to draw fantasy more. Dragons are my specialty.
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Fri Dec 30, 2005 10:45 pm
electricbluemonkey says...



Snoink wrote:The devil looks fat, lol. Because you've made the buttons on his shirt go like "(" it makes him look very chubby. XD


Well, maybe the Atkins diet failed for him.

But why is his head all...pointy and stuff.
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Fri Dec 30, 2005 10:55 pm
Emma says...



You need to improve greatly on your colouring. Try to avoid pens and use pencils and paints so you can shade your pictures. Show where the shadows are and where the light is coming from.

Apart from that, your best piece yet. Even if it is copied from a book. (A thing you should avoid)
  





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Thu Jan 12, 2006 12:45 am
Teeeeo. says...



Umm... Is it just me, or is his left (our right) hand backwards? :?
  





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Thu Jan 12, 2006 1:24 am
Sponson Light says...



No, since the pinkie is anti-aliased you must of mistaken it for another opposable thumb, making it 2 thumbs on one hand.
I thought it was too. But you can clearly see the direction of the hand and the thumb.
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