Young Writers Society

Thanks. *is fixing for next draft*

The freckles seem off. Freckles are all usually found all over the place, not just in a narrow band between the eyes and the mouth.

Does it really make sense to have this super dense band of freckles with a perfect complexion everywhere else?

The character does come out of the art though, even though most of them are sketches.

Hrmm for some reason, I like this pic even though I really don't like freckles on characters.

The feckles gave me an idea that she was some tomboyish farm girl or something of that nature.

All I can say is nice work^^

well excuse me sir squallz but i have freckles and i live in the city and i am not a tomboy!

Wow, it took me a long time to reply.

Grif- good point. When I put them all over, though, it looked like she had the chicken pox. They're cliché freckles. :p Thanks, about the character thing.

Squallz- glad you like it! Tomboyish farm girl isn't that far off.

Lucy- um.

Hello! I haven't read your descriptions of this character but if you can draw her as vividly as this then the descriptions will no doubt be just as good and accurate. Noicely done.

Generic I know, but how much can one say about a drawing? Hehe, good work.

Hey i love the art, it looks like the almost cousin of manga( if u even remotely know what im tlking about)but anyways i really love it. Im in to drawinf too i love at the moment manga animie AND STUFF i might probally post some soon and i hope you will comment them also thanks( you've given me the confidence to show my work too!)

The one thing that I really noticed was the fact that they all seemed a bit flat and cardboardy. The one thing I would really reccomend is trying to work on making them seem a bit more round, as well as looking at the anatomy of the face. Though the mouth and eyebrows had a lot of expression, the eyes were lacking thereof. Just focus on the small details, and your character could really come to life. Also- play around a bit with poses. Try to give the character less of a pose, and more of an action. If the character seems as if they're being caught mid-action, they'll seem both more interesting and more realistic.