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Hi...this the drawing that i made... actually i made her before i made the sleeping princess...

so what do you think? i think i amde her hips a bit smaller though

Oh her name by the way is Acedia.

Hey there foxfire! June here!

Yay! It's small enough to view xD.

She's skinny, haha. But she is pretty and well drawn! Her left arm is not as defined as her right, and her chin/jawbone looks weird... like it goes in when it should be coming out.

I like her hair! But, I think the overall drawing would be snazzier if you added some shading, maybe?

You did a good job!

Keep it up =D

June

Hey, foxfire!

I really like this drawing a lot. There are a few things I noticed...

-her face is so...round. It makes the chin look kind of strange.

-the pants are up too high for my taste. It makes her midriff look small, giving her a chubby look while the rest of her is thin.

-The arm is really well done. lol. I always notice the arms...

-her hair is really cute

Good work,
Sakura

She's kind of cute.

I think the problem with her chin is that it can't have that little dip in the line. Try taking a picture of yourself or someone in your family in that pose and draw the chin from that.

Her right arm sort of disappears. I'm guessing you don't like drawing hands because you hid one behing her back and put the other in her pocket.

I would play a little more with shading on this. Try to use "solid shading," as I call it. It will add more depth and visual interest.

I love her expression and pose. Keep drawing!

-Sea-

Thanks for the reply...

there is aproblem with the chin...i had a hard time drawing the chin because it was my first time drawing a person in low profile (or is it high profile) and i had to know how the body looks in that profile


thanks for the comment though...

The chin isn't quite right in this drawing. You need to make it less angular for a female especially. Her right arm does look like it's cut off going into her pockets. Really there should be the beginning of the hands there. I don't like drawing the hands either.

The eyebrows don't seem to match her smiling wide expression. Her eyebrows read sarcastic or confused while her mouth makes the observer think happy. You may want to change the expression to match. Some darker shading would add to the picture also.

The symbol on her arm makes me curious. What is it? Also in her clothing, it seems very stiff and I would suggest that you put some wrinkles if you know what I mean. I'm sure that you don't want the girl to look like she puts too much starch on her clothing. You want to give the character a 3D feel and you're leaving me with a major 2D impression. Again shading helps.

Good luck. Remember, practice makes perfect.
~Alyss

Cool anime picture! My friend loves drawing these kinds of people. I like the shading, but she really needs a background. A bit more definition and smoothing out her mouth would work wonders. Yes, her hips are kind of out of porportion to her body. Also, her chin looks kind of funny.
Cheers!
--Voxina

Her hips are too small compared to her shoulders and bust. If her shoulders are that wide, then yes, her bust is that big. But if her shoulders are that wide, then her hips also need to be wider. Big hips and breasts go hand in hand. :C Reduce her shoulders and bust, or increase everything from the waist down. :C

Also, her chin needs to come up higher. Her face has got some weird proportions there. I might redline it later, but don't count on it.

-edit - and her left arm is too long. :C

Hey Foxfire,

This drawing is actually really good, i must say. I really like your shading ability and the emotion on her face.

somethings you could fix up are the positioning of the collarbone, and were the chin ends. kind of confusing a bit. The bellybotton could be positioned a little better and the arms are a little floppy, but other then that, fantastic job.

Really well done!