Young Writers Society

I feel the burden of the world
And so I write
To ease the burden that
I hold, so I write

What did I expect, they ask
I expected what they told me to,
And now as the glitter turns to dust
Should I learn to speak?

I caged from the world my emotion
And so I write
These feelings the papers only known
So I write

For the papers could sympathize
Without letting world know my agony
And I know I realize
That the pains are kept in me

So, to the world
here is the next drop of ink
Of all the things
feelings and thoughts that I think

So I write for the world
I hold secrets but not lies
So I write the truth in bold
I am not on disguise

Review!~
It's a nice poem. Your choice of word was good and you conveyed your ideas nicely. What I didn't like was that in some places the flow just sort of broke, changing the rhythm.

VergielynHolmes wrote:I feel the burden of the world
And so I write
The burden that I hold
Just to ease, so I write

The first two lines are fine but the next two don't make proper sense. I think you could also put it like:

I feel the burden of the world,
And so I write.
To ease the burden
That I hold, So I write.

VergielynHolmes wrote:What did I expect, they ask
I expected what they told me to expect
Now the glitter turns to dust
Should I learn to speak?

This is one of the places I feel the flow breaks. See, the sentences here are longer. Also you haven't rhymed, which I guess is fine. But you haven't put any punctuation so it makes things a bit confusing. I'd put it this way:

What did I expect, they ask.
I expected what they told me to,
And now as the glitter turns dust,
Should I learn to speak?

VergielynHolmes wrote:I caged from the world my emotion
And so I write
These feelings the papers only known
So I write

For the papers could sympathize
Without letting world know my agony
And I know I realize
That the pains are kept in me

So, to the world
here is the next drop of ink
Of all the things
feelings and thoughts that I think

These three paragraphs are quite good. The flow and wording is really good and your imagery is quite nice.
Overall: It's a good poem.
The only thing I find a bit irritating is the absence of punctuation. Punctuation makes things way easier. It is quiet useful when you're saying the poem out loud as you get to know when to pause.
Hope this helped.
Keep writing~
Angel

Thanks Angel. Indeed it helped