Young Writers Society

Once again here is another of my weird stories.

"Give it to me!!" the little deformed hobbit hissed. "Give me the precious!"
"No!" Dodo yelled. "Look what it did to you! You speak in third person half the time! I hate that!"
Beagle the deformed hobbit circled Dodo like a circling thing. He stared at him with evil eyes hatching a twisted plan in his head.
"Give us the precious!" Beagle yelled. "Give us the precious!"
"No! The nose-ring is evil! I have to destroy it!" Dodo said sternly.
"But Beagle is not evil." Beagle said. "It goes well with beagle's gothic outfit. It matches! It matches!."
Dodo grabed a stick from the side of the road ad hit Beagle on the head. "See you just spoke in third person!"
Suddenly a tree branch grabbed Beagle and lifted him up in the air. "You do not need the nose-ring," The tree said.
"Yes Beagle does!" Beagle hissed. The tree raised beagle even higher and flung him in the air. Beagle soared miles away before he finally hit the ground.
"He really doesn't need the nose-ring," the tree said. "Because he keeps stealing that gothic outfit from my closet. Evil twisted deformed siblings, don't you just hate them?"

lol. this made me laugh. Kudos for the first good lotr spoof I've seen

i never loved LOTR or anything close until I read this. You should really expand LMAO!

Expand! Expand! More description, another scene, more characters! More, more more!

I had a lot of fun writing this so, I will definately be spoofing plenty of other movies out there.
Keep an eye out for more Random Randomness I should have some more next week.

You really should expand this... Make it seem a little less rushed, use those great parody sayings where you leave nothing unmocked. This made me smile, but I think it has the potential to REALLY make me crack up.

Nice.

Thanks for the advice guys I will definately expand this but first I will spoof another poor unsuspecting victim. Bwahahaha!!

hehe lol great thats fantastic