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Thoughts On Silent Night



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Sun Dec 26, 2010 2:49 pm
KrisChan says...



Thoughts On Silent Night.

As chilly as the winds that bite
On the long road in a winter shade of pale
The traveler plods on un-ending snowy tide
The lights go down in the midst of gale

Now a vagabond in mind toddles on with not a destination in sight
A broken heart of a matrimony seeking to heal
A mind tormented by slander
A life wretched by 'ill fate'
A marriage mired in Karmic retribution or demonic curse?
She-cancer sufferer whose days are numbered
A heart torn between love and hate
He-misfit provider, a 'failure'
A soul suffering the same cancerous fangs that devour body and mind
Two mortals holed in torturous plight
The mind has no place to hide
The body only divine intervention can right

Silent night,Holy night
All is clear,all is bright



Written on Christmas Eve
Last edited by KrisChan on Mon Dec 27, 2010 4:33 am, edited 4 times in total.
  





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Sun Dec 26, 2010 2:54 pm
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Please comment and advise~!!!Thanks!
Last edited by KrisChan on Mon Dec 27, 2010 5:25 am, edited 2 times in total.
  





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KrisChan wrote:Thoughts On Silent Night.

As chilly as the winds that bite
On the long road in a winter shade of pale
The traveler plods on unending un-endingsnowy tide
The lights go down in the midst of gale

Now a vagabond in mind toddles on with not a destination in sight
A broken heart of a matrimony seeking to heal
A mind tormented by slander
A life wretched by 'ill fate'
A marriage mired in Karmic retribution or demonic curse?
She-I think you meant She'sa cancer sufferer whose days are numbered
A heart torn between love and hate
He-he's amisfit provider, a 'failure'
A soul suffering the same cancerous fangs that devour body and mind
Two mortals holed in torturous plight
The mind has no place to hide
The body only divine intervention can right

Silent night,Holy night
All is clear,all is bright



Written on Christmas Eve
when you grow up you realize that Prince Charming is not as easy to find as you thought. You realize the bad guy is not wearing a black cape and he's not easy to spot; he's really funny, and he makes you laugh, and he has perfect hair and isnt wearing a black cape and easy to spot Lots of Love Jenn
  





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Mon Dec 27, 2010 4:53 am
KrisChan says...



Thanks for your advice! I did a minor correction,but I am holding this piece for furthur comments from other reviewers~Being a graphic artist myself,I wanted more emphasis rather than just mere statements.That was why the article 'a' was left out after She and He.
  








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