Young Writers Society

PERSON 1

I am awesome!

PERSON 2

No you aren't!

PERSON 3

I kill you both! Bang bang bang!

PERSON 1 AND PERSON 2

Ohnoes, we are dead!

~The End~

That was amazing. I am dumbfounded. My head is spinning from how brilliant that was. This piece is a real tribute to the awesomeness that is Snoink. You have a real future in plays, if this is anything to go by.

The characterization was amazing. I felt like I knew these people. And the dialogue was so life-like.

I can't tell you exactly how awesome I think this is, you're brilliant!

All hail Snoink and her awesome plays!

Probably the worst test I've ever seen.

Pork

Brilliant! Wow! I can't even believe what my eyes rae seeing! Best thing since Shakespeare! I totally agree with Chocoholic!

You have to write a part two!

-Ailam

PERSON 1

I am awesome!

Now, this is a very abrupt beginning. I suggest that you extend this to a rant of about sixty lines. It would also help the characterisation.

PERSON 2

No you aren't!

I thought that this part was a bit confusing. You introduce a conflict: is the character awesome, or aren't they? This conflict could be resolved by several hundred lines of "Yes I am!" "No you aren't!"

PERSON 3

I kill you both! Bang bang bang!

I find that this character is the most developed. They are such a fully evolved human being that explosions emit from them. Incredible. I want to know more of their background.

PERSON 1 AND PERSON 2

Ohnoes, we are dead!

A tragic ending. I almost cried.

Overall, a masterpiece. When's the sequel?

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oookaaay. This play is nuts. It doesn't make any sense at all. But well done for trying.

This is a crazy play. Why would people kill each other for no reason? Still, not to hard to act out and it's short.

I don't get it. Why did he kill them both? What is the point of the play here? I don't really call this a play. There are no scene, characters or plot that takes place. What is the point of this?

Listen, you all. This... is... GENIOUS! Anyone who doesn't get it may want to go and see a counselor.

Peace!

-Ailam

Alleluia!

Now that's what I call a masterpiece...and whoever thinks otherwise just doesn't know the difference between true talent and everything else!

Bravo my friend...but there is one little bittie thing I'm going to ask of you...

Where's the sequal?!?!!

I love how this has gotten more reviews than anything I've ever posted. Or others. ^_^
Maybe that's what it's testing...?

OHMYGOODNESS This is just like a movie I saw last year! It won Best Picture. It's called The Departed. This is just condensed.

well
It had a lot of wit and watever
it was great
though there was no sense of this play
it was good for timepass.

If only my family life were as simple as this play.

*Stars*

I'm afraid you have a violence problem. Violence is not the answer! I like you pig picture though. you seem to have a great imagination, I would like to see a story that you really TRIED to write!