Young Writers Society

Very Entertaining!
I loved it!
especially Billy.
hes lyk a stabilising quantity in the story.
the part about the dad and the daughter was entertaining too!
Quite funny.
tho more humour could have been injected in a more discreet manner.
comedies are the hardest to write LOL
very difficult.

im new here so im a newbie!
nice story!

yeah that was...interesting...now why did the daddy have a hillbilly accent?

ooh but i did like billy. he reminds me of the cricket from mulan...what you were going for judging by your avitar

i thought it was very cute besides the parts that confused me like the mom talking to herself...

but i still liked it!! good job!!! ^^