![Razz :P](./images/smilies/icon_razz.gif)
Character: No, nothing's wrong. Everything is right here. So, since you can't find what makes you a good author you're not really a good one, so--
After author, there should be a comma because it's a complex sentence.
![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_biggrin.gif)
Character: (sighs; to self) Didn't I say 'e wasn't a bright crayon. . .
I don't like the apostrophe and then an 'e' for he because it doesn't fit the character, the way he speaks wasn't like that in other places. It just doesn't fit.
![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_biggrin.gif)
That's it. It was brilliant. But I would add more actions though, but it was prefect. *Loves story and runs to give a gold star*
I'd rate it five stars out of five.
![Idea :idea:](./images/smilies/icon_idea.gif)
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