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Tue Jun 22, 2010 5:57 pm
Jas says...



Yay!
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 9:19 pm
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This looks good. I haven't read Gone but I have read a similar book
Age 13
Gender Male
Appearance Tallish, Brown Hair, Muscular, Cool clothes
Personality Laid back all in all fairly mature for his age. Likes to keep himself to himself, but some times has random outbursts of emotion. He is a thinker and can usually use his intelligence to get him out of scrapes that he is always getting into.
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Name Kyran Power
Ability: He can control/absorb energy, including life force.
Weakness: Can be merciless. He doesn't hold a very high regard for Human life. Something from his past made him how he is and he refuses to talk about it.
Don't ask me what a quidnunc is or else I'll Floccinaucinhilipilificate you
I KILLED BOB
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 9:35 pm
Jas says...



I like your profile TPO, only thing is the name. This isn't a Star Wars book or LOtR. The names in the book are way normal like Sam and Diana and Pete. Same to you Arahnia. :D Just change those and your good.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 10:12 pm
Day says...



BTW: Isn't controlling 4 elements a bit much?

Name: Kyle


Age: 15


Appearance:
Spoiler! :
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And he wears a crescent moon necklace.


Personality: A guy who generally remains calm even when things are going badly. If someone he likes or respects is in danger, and he will agree to help immediately.


Flaws: If you do not hold his respect then don't expect any help. Not selfish, but definitely won't go out on a whim for people. Doesn't expect anyone will be able to hurt him without him knowing about it.


Ability: Telepathy (Being able to read minds and communicate in them without talking)


Side: Peridido beach


Background: Grew up the neglected son of a rich family. They didn't interact or talk to him much, and so his childhood was one of self interest, discovery and friendship.


Other: Up for love
"If the king doesn't lead, how can he expect his subordinates to follow?"
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 10:18 pm
Fox says...



OOH! This looks cool! Save me a spot please!
I am a fox, sly and quick.
I never give up
I never quit

I do what I can
I stand and fight

I strategize
I stand tall
throughout the night

I am a fox
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 10:33 pm
Jas says...



Sure :) Oh yeah, forgot to say, please control only one or two, but those two should be adjacent like fire and water or earth and air. Thanks :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 10:40 pm
Fox says...



Wait so we can't have the ability to control both Fire and Earth or anything like that???
I am a fox, sly and quick.
I never give up
I never quit

I do what I can
I stand and fight

I strategize
I stand tall
throughout the night

I am a fox
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 11:04 pm
Jas says...



If you really want to, okay.
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Tue Jun 22, 2010 11:29 pm
Howler says...



We need more Coates!
"I'm fearless in my heart
They will always see that in my eyes
I am the passion, I am the warfare
I will never stop
Always constant,
Accurate,
Intense"
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Wed Jun 23, 2010 4:09 am
Ray112 says...



I was gonna make a peridido beach character but i guess i'll make a coates. Or would you guys like to focus on the normal kids versus the mutated kids?
"Insert life changing statement"
  





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Wed Jun 23, 2010 4:11 am
Jas says...



I'll be making a Coates character too. Actually, Melinda will just be Coates instead. :D
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  





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Wed Jun 23, 2010 4:17 am
Ray112 says...



ha ha okay i'll do the same.
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Wed Jun 23, 2010 4:48 am
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Name: Devin Dedaux

Age:14

Appearance: He's tall, skinny, and has long gangly arms. His hair is dyed black with red tips that he spiked so now it looks like flames. His eyes are brown but he wears contacts to change the color sky blue. The combination of his pale skin and bags under his eyes make him look like a ghost.
Spoiler! :
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Personality: People tend to steer clear of him because of his strange appearance. Devin doesn't say much and his unsocial nature makes those around him uncomfortable.

Flaws: He can't swim. In fact, he's afraid of large bodies of water and won't go near any beaches or pools even.

Ability: Devin has the ability to attract matter towards his body like some sort of human magnet. He can also switch and repel matter( this includes: people, animals, trees, cars, garbage cans, and on one occasion his great aunt, etc...).

Side: Coates

Background: His father is a successful businessman and his mother's a lawyer. He's visited all sorts of places such as: Britain, New York, Germany, Thailand, and Hong Kong. His parents were always too busy to pay attention to him so he did things on his own. He's often alone and he's used to being alone. He's attended private schools all over the world and was expelled out of almost everyone because of his appearance. The kids at school feared him and many picked fights with him. And Devin never had anything against hurting a few kids. He's failed the 10th grade five times and has a record of anger management issues. Everything was fine until one of his last schools found a butterfly knife in his locker.

Other:
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Wed Jun 23, 2010 2:08 pm
Calligraphy says...



Do I have to change my name? I mean I know a few Blakes, and I know a few Savages. Like it is a last name I came up with because it was in the phone book next to me....
  





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Wed Jun 23, 2010 4:41 pm
Jas says...



Okay, I guess :)
I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

~*~
  








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