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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:57 am
TNCowgirl says...



Leal flirted and teased with Tom. Inside she was boiling. But she was going to make him feel like scum. Any chance she got, she'd kiss him, or touch his arm lovingly. She would laugh at any jokes he cracked or glare at anyone he was glaring at. She could tell it was driving Kaleigh up the wall. When school was over she was holding his hand and smiling.

"Hate to say this, but I have to get some stuff done for my mom." He said looking at her and then kissing her lips.

"Ah, ok, I'll see you tomorrow?" She asked looking up at him.

"Of coures." They kissed and then he ran to his car and drove off. She stood there her teeth clenched.

"He go off to see his mistress?" Jake laughed walking over

"Probably." She replied walking towards the bus.

"let me give you a ride home." He said.

"Alright." She followed him to his car and climbed in.

"What's the plan?" He asked.

"To heep coals on his head." She smiled.
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 12:12 am
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"so are you going to act like you love him, then just suddenley do something to hurt him?" Jake asked

"Yes" she smiled

"Good plan" he says and jumps into his car.

When they get to her house he helps her out of his car. He gets closer to her and pushes his lips on hers. She put more effort in and they shared a passionate moment.
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 4:01 am
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***Ok, heeping coals on someone means they make them feel horrible by being really nice.***

When they pulled apart Leal bit her lower lip and smiled. "Normally, there would be no way I would do this. But sense he is doing the same." She smiled and kissed him again. When tehy puleld away she smiled and then ran inside leaning against the door and sighing.

"What is going on?" Rye asked. She looked up to see him standing in front of her.

"Long story, lots of homework." She said trying to run past him.

"No no no, your not getting away with it that easy, missy. What happened to TOm?" He asked.

"he's cheating on me." She replied. "Had a girlfriend already, but they have an open relationship, and he didn't tell me about this."

"I'm gonna kill hiM!" Rye growled.

"NO! You have to act normal around hima nd don't tell mom and dad unless they see me with Jake. I'm heaping caols on his head and going to make his life miserable." She replied.

"That works too." Rye sighed. "I still dont' like it."
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Fri Dec 19, 2008 2:51 pm
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Jake walked down the road feeling like the best he could possibley feel. He was gald that Tom had a relationship with Kayleigh but also it broke his heart to no he'd hurt Leal so much. He looked back seeing leal and her brother Rye standing talking to each other. he wondered what about.

A few minutes later he was outside of his house and his brother Wil was with one of Jake's ex's Sarah. She was a tall girl emo girl with the darkest eyes.

"Hey Jake" she called over to Jake but he ignored her, shed left him for his brother. She was not worth the hello.

He followed into the house and went straight up to his room. He layed down on his bed and feel sleep.
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Sat Dec 20, 2008 2:24 am
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Leal curled up in her bed after finishing her homework and chores, then she went to bed. WHen she got up the next morning she got dressed and caught the bus. Tom pulled her down in the seat next to him and she laughed hugging him and then kissing him softly.

"Hello." He smiled.

"MOrning." She smiled back inside she was boiling, but she wasn't going to show it.
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Mon Dec 22, 2008 10:50 pm
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Jake sat in the seat infornt Tom and Leal and looked behind his seat.

"Oh behave you to and get a room" He said laughing,

"Why dont you go get a life with Candice" Said Tom.

"Because I have somebody else" He replied looking at Leal then looking away.

"whos that then Jake" Leal smiled.
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 1:31 am
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Leal leaned against Tom trying not to glare at him. He dare ruin this she would kill him.

"Now that is for me to know." he smiled.

"Ah, that's not fair." Tom laughed.

"But it is. I don't want anyone to know who she is until I'm ready." he repleid with a smile.

"Does she agree with that?" She asked. "Cause what happened to TOm's sister was cruel."

"Yes, she knows." He laughed. "It was her idea."
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 3:01 am
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" Oh thats fair then" Leal said, "So are you gonna tell us anything about her"

"Well she beautiful, sweet, romantic and well the nicer person ever" He smiled. Leal blushed at this.

"Well she sounds as nice as my Leal" Tom smiled as he kissed her forhead,

"Dont she just" Leal giggled and glaced at Jake.
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Tue Dec 23, 2008 3:08 am
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Leal leaned against his chest holding him close as she did. She glared a little at Jake then smield up at Tom.

"We're here, let's go." She said as the buss stopped.


***Sorry, all I had, my brain is dead***
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Sat Dec 27, 2008 8:14 pm
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*by the way Jake garder le silence, vous ne pas si l'un de ces pas en français.means Jake keep it silent, you dont no if any of these no french.*

"ahh we have stupid french today dont we" Jake laughed as he looked at Leal, Nobody else around knew any french besides them to.

"Je t'aime, tu veux dire le monde à moi" He grinned at Leal,

"What does that mean Jake" Tom asked,

"Oh it just means Your a great friend and you make me smile" Jake replied knowing it ment I love you, you mean the world to me.

"Jake garder le silence, vous ne pas si l'un de ces pas en français." Leal said replying to Jakes french comment.
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Sat Dec 27, 2008 8:16 pm
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**OK**

No one seemed to know though. She leaned against Tom and smiled at Jake. This was so wrogng. But she was going to heep coals.

"So, are you going ot be at lunch today?" She asked Tom.

"no, sorry love." Tom smiled kissing her.

"don't worry about it." SHe smiled back. 'i'm sure we can hang out afters chool."
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Sat Dec 27, 2008 8:45 pm
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"Umm... Im not sure have to go visit my nan" Tom said in his innocent voice,

"Oh.. Thats a shame" She frowned,

"You can come round mine for tea if you want Leal, Im sure you and my sister will get on fine" Jake smiled, knowing what he really wanted.
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Sat Dec 27, 2008 8:49 pm
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Leal looked at Tom and put on a sad face. "You sure you can't hang out?"She asked.

"i'm sure, I'm sorry. Go hang out with Jake's sister. i think y'all would get along." He said kssing her softly. "Dont' look at me like that."

"Fine." She pouted at him a minute more then looked at Jake. "Can I catch a ride to your place with oyu then?" She aske.d

"Sure." He nodded.

*~*~*~*~*~Lunch Time~*~*~*~*~*

Leal watched Tom walk off and she growled.

"Relax, I think that look is really helping you when he decides to blow you off." Jake laughed walking over.

"I hope it hurts him too!" She hissed.
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Sat Dec 27, 2008 10:17 pm
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"Well are you really sure, I know that I want you but if you still want Tom.."Jake trailed off,

"I dont want Tom!"she shouted in my face, loud anough so only i could hear.

Jake looked into Leal's eyes,

"Ok Leal, but think about it" Jake smiled and walked off to the school.
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Sun Dec 28, 2008 5:23 am
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Leal growled and hurried after him. "I've thought about it. I've thought about everything." She said as she caught up.

"And?" He smiled.

"I want you too. I'm not going to let somoen use me though." She sighed. "I'm not letting that go unpunished. this won't last much longer."
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