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Wed Dec 17, 2008 8:47 pm
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Tom could suspect something was on Leal's mind. How could he let kayleigh have his number, they were meant to keep it quiet. Jake had set Tom up with her a while ago but we were having an 'open' relationship. Now he felt like he was cheating on her. Kayleigh was a cheerleader, one of the most popular girls in the school. But she was with him. They used to sit on the park and she used to hide her face so nobody could see it was her.

He turned back to leal "I love you" he said as he kissed her neck.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 8:51 pm
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***Jake should so tell her about that***

"I love you too." Leal said lifting her face up and kissing him again. She smiled and jumped up pulling him with her.

"NOw where? It's almost dark outside!" He moaned.

"Just come on." She said pulling him outside and to the shed. She jumped on a fourwheeler. He climbed on behind her and she took off after the open feild on teh back of their property. There was a single oak in the middle of it and she loved going out there and looking t the stars.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:05 pm
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* ok at the next day at school, and Then he can show her him sitting with her after school. haha lets make this as romantic as a twilight seen*

He laid near the tree with her. Watching the stars, she grabs his hand.

"If you were smart, you'd stay away from me." said Tom as he admits.
"Ok. For arguments sake, let's say I'm not smart." Leal replys as she pushes his hair back and kisses him on the cheek.

"I don't have the strength to stay away from you anymore" said Tom as he grabs her hand.

Leal reply's "Why do you have to stay away from me? Whats going on Tom"

"You just shouldn't trust me Leal" he cries.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:07 pm
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***Sounds just like the movie. :P ***

Leal kissed his lips hushing him. "But I do." She smiled wrapping her arm around his neck and kissing him passionatly.

"You shouldn't though." He started to argue again. She kissed him again.

"Your not changing the fact that I trust you." She smiled. "Don't argue it. I'm not going to lose you."
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:15 pm
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*hmm... maybe its because theres this little thing called imdb and it has quote from the movie, then I edited them, but you didn't hear that from me :D*

Inside he felt like he was dying, why couldn't he just tell her.

Tom asks "Are you afraid?"

"Afaid of what, I'm only afraid of losing you." she replyed.

He held her close to him, keeping his secrets trapped inside.

"I'd rather die than to stay away from you Tom" her voice is muffled as she says this and he holds her closer.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:24 pm
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***Ya, they kinda sound weird in here. Oh well***

Leal lifted her lips to his and kissed him then laid her head on his shoulder.

"Now, waht do you want to do?" She asked looking up at him.


*Sorry, all I had. *
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:34 pm
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"I dont no" He replied "Im tired"

They fell asleep next to the tree.

*sorry, I think you'll be able to make something out of the next day*
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:39 pm
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**OK**

Leal woke up the next day still in Tom's arms.

"SCHOLL!" She cried jumping up and pulling him with her.


*~**~*

They manaaged to get to school on time and they walked in arm and arm. She went to her first class that he wasn't inand sat down. Jake slid in the seat next to her smiling.

"How are you doing?" He asked with a smile.

"I'm alive, tired, but alive." She shrugged.
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:45 pm
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" oh well, Im surpised your in a happy mood after what To told you" Laughed jake,

"What do you mean? What Tom told me?" She questioned,

"oh... Its not for me to say"Jake whispered,

Leal grabbed his shoulders and shaked him "Tell me Jake! please"

"Ok..ok" Jake suddenly said " Toms cheating on you with Kayleigh"

Leal sat back down, her heart had stopped.

"prove it" she said,

"I will at lunch" he replied

"He's not here at lunch" she said

"Thats what he told you"
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Wed Dec 17, 2008 9:53 pm
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LEal eyed him then the teacher walked in. After class she got up and he motioned for her to follow him. She did. He led her around the back of the school and she stopped. Tom and KAyleigh were sitting on a bench tangled together and making out. She stepped back and then turned around storming off. Her heart was pounding in her chest. How could he do that.

Jake followed her. "didn't he tell you they were togheter?" He asked.

"NO!" She said tears building in her eyes.
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 1:29 am
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Jake Ryan

"aww Leal" I said as she fell to the floor, I wrapped his arms around her.

"How could he do that to me" she cried as she pulled at my clothes,

"dont worry no one will hurt you again" I replied.
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:02 am
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Leal looked up at him. "How coul dyou know that?" She demanded.

"I guess I can't really make sure your never hurt again, but I can try." He said stroking her cheek. She felt tingles run up her face.

"No, cause I'm going to make him regret it. he's going to admit it to me." She hissed.

*tears*
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:30 am
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"well I'll help you what ever you need" Said jake.

"Thankyou" she replied and hugged him.

Tom was walking round the corner with kayleigh so she had to think fast. She grabbed jake's top and pulled him closer and kissed him. She actually enjoyed it.
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:41 am
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***I thought it was going to be secret. What she was planning was more like being sweet and trusting to him so that he felt guilty about not telling her.***

Leal tried to protest when Jake turned her so that Tom wouldn't reconize her, but he wouldn't let her free. She heard Tom walk past with Kaleigh and then Jake pulled away. She took a deep breath and looked up at him. She wasn't about to admit that she had liked that, or that it felt more right then anything else. Obviously she didn't have to because Jake dipped his head down again and their lips met. When they pulled apart she looked up at him.

"Wow." He whispered. She nodded.

"That didn't happen.' She said softly.

"Why not?" He asked looking down at her.

"Because that messes up my plan." She replied looking at him. She smiled a little and kissed his lips softly. "To tempting." She said turning to walk away. He grabbed her arm and kissed her again.

"So?" He asked.

"So, it will ruin my plan if Tom finds out." She whispered hoarsly at his closeness.
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Thu Dec 18, 2008 2:51 am
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* I really like the way it just went, you post was really good*

"and whats the plan" I ask as I hold her arm still in my hand, "and does it involves me"

"Maybe" she smiled and skipped away.

'woah! what happened there' I thought to myself. Was it true Leal liked me. Her words 'To tempting' showed that she wanted more. I wanted to know this plan.

In lesson i sat with Tom and Leal, they acted sweet, so close but inside I could tell what Leal was thinking.
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